You will come back

You will come back

A Poem by Kitty
"

Revised version of smth I wrote last summer

"
Stood on a stage
Uncovered
Our souls touch
Shaken, breathless

It follows 

Adhering behind
They conjure old lines
With such cryptic eyes
It soars on over

Don't come back
Don't come back
Don't come back

From up here - you're
A smooth hollow
Under my wing
Little plaything

What are you?

Blue rose abiding
Entrapped on my path
Petals, eternal
Pistil, elusive

Don't come back
Don't come back
Don't come back

Crimson body
Hypnotic smile
The pattern drips
Like mothers bile.

Go away

And once more
I'm all yours, all the time
Our destined affinity
You and me.

© 2023 Kitty


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

Hello Kitty, and welcome to the Café!
Your piece is interesting, and I couldn't help but think that you were talking about anxiety or fear of being on stage, exposed where everyone observes you. Your repetition of the line "don't come back" makes me think that this person does not want their anxiety to overtake them. The last stanza/paragraph states "and once more, I'm all yours, all the time" makes me think that that the person's anxiousness has won this battle and overtook them. Although I could be wrong in my interpretation, I did enjoy reading this! Please do let me know what you had in mind when you wrote this :)



Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kitty

1 Year Ago

Hello Aura, I appreciate your time and effort in reviewing my work. Your interpretation is not entir.. read more



Reviews

Welcome to the site, Kitty! I loved the composition here and its certainly a well-constructed piece. looking forward to your other works.
Mk.t.g

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kitty

1 Year Ago

Hello Mk.t.g, thank you for welcoming me and for your feedback.
Mk.t.g

1 Year Ago

Your welcome!
Absolutely beautiful love it well done 👍

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kitty

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Julie
This is probably the most original romance poem I've read in a while. Its format is intriguing, too. Really, keep up the good work, Kitty, 'cause this revision you did was great! :3

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kitty

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Keagen Cole. your praise makes me nervous, but also proud of the work I put into this. I .. read more
Keagen Cole

1 Year Ago

Anytime. ;)
There’s the saying that courage isn’t not being afraid, it’s doing it anyway. Maybe love is not about not being afraid of all the commitment and vulnerability that comes with it, but about accepting that this will happen, you cannot control all of it and you have to roll with it in the end - love and the longing for connection still wins.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kitty

1 Year Ago

I understand most of your statements, as my eternal lust for human connection has overpowered me num.. read more
Hello Kitty, and welcome to the Café!
Your piece is interesting, and I couldn't help but think that you were talking about anxiety or fear of being on stage, exposed where everyone observes you. Your repetition of the line "don't come back" makes me think that this person does not want their anxiety to overtake them. The last stanza/paragraph states "and once more, I'm all yours, all the time" makes me think that that the person's anxiousness has won this battle and overtook them. Although I could be wrong in my interpretation, I did enjoy reading this! Please do let me know what you had in mind when you wrote this :)



Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kitty

1 Year Ago

Hello Aura, I appreciate your time and effort in reviewing my work. Your interpretation is not entir.. read more

Share This
Email
Facebook
Twitter
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

127 Views
5 Reviews
Rating
Shelved in 1 Library
Added on March 12, 2023
Last Updated on June 24, 2023

Author

Kitty
Kitty

About
Hello, I'm new to this site and a beginner at poetry. I've never really uploaded written works before so my posting will be inconsistent. more..

Writing
Creep Creep

A Poem by Kitty



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..