Boxed

I'd like to know what this is..

Wrap, wrap, wrap,

In a box you go,

Tucked away in the back of it all,

Mindless and confused,

Dreadful and abused,

Wishing and tucking,

Bucking at the wind,

Ice cold breath,

Sealed with a cigarette,

Coffee shop and bar,

Shivering spine,

With a slight grind at the mind,

Twisting all about,

Shouting all around,

Counting of the seconds,

Seeing of the sea,

Hearing of the death,

Eyes of the blind,

Waiting at the gravel,

Trailing of a fox,

All locked in a box,

Author's Note

So, I really don't know what this is to be honest.
I was just laying there and started typing this, no strugle nor stop until I was done.
Don't be too harsh, but I'd really love to know what y'all think of this..
What it means to you..
To me.. It's confusing kinda..Just a spilled out heart more or less..

Reviews

[K-mo]

I think it is great! I love when the mind does all the typing!

[Serena Kaye]

Thanks.

[Rob Santana]

Im the same way, I just start writing random stuff and I look at it later and have a scooby doo moment, arg? what the hell did I just write,hahaha. Sometimes I can put words together and come up with something and sometimes,nothing. But hey, That's the wonderful thing about writing,it may not always make sense to you,but when someone else reads it it may touch that person in a certain way. Even if it was a couple of words someone will always be able to relate. Keep writing. :)

[Serena Kaye]

Heh, thanks!

[nigrum homonculus]

what rhea said. this sounds like venting but in a very controlled way. i think the flow adds to it aswell. all in all it was a great poem and i enjoyed this a lot! well done

[Serena Kaye]

Thank you..

[TheJordBaker]

love how you just let your mind run with this, it's quite entertaining; quick pace and abstract. more good stuff :)

[Serena Kaye]

Thank you!(:

[Rhea752]

to me this told me of a little box bursting to the seams with lethal feelings and secrets. your past. very well done and enjoyable.

[Serena Kaye]

Thank you!

[Persephone]

I really enjoyed this read - we all box things away that try to get out hehe - great job!

[Serena Kaye]

Thank you!
&' very true. Heh..

[Androglossia]

This is a good write from a writer who didn't even think so much about it:) Impressive actually. Your poem speaks of individuality, life itself, how you live it and unspoken thoughts.

This reminds me of the saying Life is a box of chocolates and yeah it's does't seemed to relate, i know:)

[Serena Kaye]

Haha thanks!(:

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The structure of this is really fun when you are reading it. Great job

[Serena Kaye]

Thanks!

[kublakhan27]

I'd have to read it a couple more times before I can interpret it myself, but I always saw that as a good sign from a writer's perspective...it means you've written something truly mysterious, which is good in a poem :)

[Serena Kaye]

Thanks!
My gosh, I read it maybe 50 times!

[kublakhan27]

No problem :) well a couple doesn't necessarily mean two to me, a couple could become twenty with me lol :P

[Serena Kaye]

When I first wrote it, i read it over and over again, trying to think of what it means.

[kublakhan27]

Haha yeah I always wind up doing that when I start looking at my old stuff, trying to figure out what in the world I was thinking :P

[Serena Kaye]

Haha so true. xD

[kublakhan27]

:D

[Dr. Wood ?]

I suppose we are all inside out own little boxes...some harsher and less forgiving than others...It is strange the words that come out when you aren't thinking. Stream of consciousness they call it don't they? You poems are generally dark and deep and that reflects in this...Hell I sound like a shrink...The seeing of the sea gives a little hope...bucking at the wind suggests determination...But it is still full of sadness....That'll be fifty dollars please!!

[Serena Kaye]

Hah, lovely.
Very true,
I really don't know what my tone is for this, I was kinda upset when I wrote it, but wasn't meaning for it to be. This is just stuff that rambled from my mind to my phone..Crazy..
Thanks!