Rose Red

Images after images,

Ones that bring nightmares,

Ones of a canvas,

A bloody one,

Lines after lines,

Cold bloody razor,

Piercing the delegate skin,

Warm fresh blood,

Trailing down,

Reaching the palm,

Falling to the floor,

Heart beating fast,

Faster and faster,

Until it explodes,

Bam,

It’s over,

Splat,

All over the place,

A rose red mess,

Reviews

[ewest1220]

I agree with thejordbaker very well done on the transition it's literally like Bam! and then the track changes completely. Great job!

[Serena Kaye]

Thanks lol.

[TheJordBaker]

incredibly powerful, the change of pace was fantastic, really helps the reader emphasise.

[Serena Kaye]

Thank you!

[Dr. Wood ?]

I like this, but surely Cold is not spelt CLOD...other than that a macabre masterpiece

[Serena Kaye]

Whoops! Thanks for telling me that! xD
I was very tired when I wrote this earlier..
Swimming can tire someone..
Heh..

[Dr. Wood ?]

not as much as DROWNING!!!!

[Serena Kaye]

He true, but not if you know how to swim, shh...I'm a mermaid.. Well sometimes, I wish...

[Dr. Wood ?]

A Texan Mermaid...now theres an idea for a poem....

[Serena Kaye]

Heh, I was just thinking of that, I'm probably going to watch Little Mermaid, and write one xD

[Dr. Wood ?]

I'll see if I can beat you to it....BUt you have the advantage....YOU have little mermaid....I dont even have a copy of SPLASH!

[Serena Kaye]

Hehe. Okay xD

[Tai Ryens]

I just love how you sped the pace up after 'faster and faster.' Amazing.

[Serena Kaye]

Heh, thanks Ryan.

[~Sara~]

This was another great, powerful piece! Great JOb! :)

[Serena Kaye]

Heh, thank you!

[Rhea752]

powerful, emotional, and horrible at the same time. brilliantly written. i loved it!!! Keep it up!!! :)

[Serena Kaye]

Thank you, and I will.

[Admiral Kirk]

Wow, very descriptive and powerful. The poem sort of speeds up after the "faster and faster" part, and then it just ends so abruptly. Powerful effect. Well done.

[Serena Kaye]

Heh, thank you.

[Admiral Kirk]

You're welcome. :)

[Serena Kaye]

(: