Lines In The Sand

Looking around seeing nothing but hypocrisy

Hidden behind the lies in our so called democracy

But I heed nothing but my own philosophy

I guess I hate everyone subconsciously

 

I’m slowly drowning in my own tears

As I realize all my worst fears

Just hoping that the sky clears

Whilst my demons control my gears

 

And my spring was all but green

Continued kicks to my spleen

Death comes with sheen

For me, a mere teen

 

So many moments that cannot be recalled

So many that I shouldn’t possibly be appalled

Yet I’ve become somewhat enthralled

By all the names remaining uncalled

 

Seeing the zombies of our day on vacation

Makes me think of global annihilation

Gives me a sudden thought of pain amplification

Suddenly realizing that we never needed a segregation

 

So I politely invite you to live a day in my black pit of despair

But there are monsters worse than me so please beware

And tread lightly, for my feelings in complete disrepair

But now I’ll have to sit you down in my electric chair

 

You’ll just sit there and die

Reluctantly I’ll cry

And as you let your soul fly

I’ll silently sigh

 

I’ll crawl back into my hole and hide

Where the last sane part of me died

Where I always sat and cried

‘Cuz of all the things I tried

 

Over everything that failed

Suddenly I just bailed

To get away from all the death I inhaled

But now my mind is so derailed

 

Still the rusty sound of my voice

Echoes that it never was my choice

The darkness swallows the last of my joys

So the world can finally rejoice

 

And then you can finally bury me

Lock me in my coffin and throw away the key

I’ll never tell you my final plea

But darling now you’re free.

Author's Note

Honest opinions please.

Reviews

[Morrigan Nicole]

The first stanza was the best, in my opinion.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem. I tell people. Title is very important. This title of this poem is very good. You took me to many places and your opinion of people and location gave life to the words.
"Seeing the zombies of our day on vacation
Makes me think of global annihilation
Gives me a sudden thought of pain amplification
Suddenly realizing that we never needed a segregation"
A strong ending to the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[White_lily]

I love how it rhymes, very good poem indeed :)

[Serenity Faith]

A very deep, emotional write. The feelings it holds, falls of the page like sand through open fingertips. Very well written. You kept your rhythm and rhyme up in a lengthy piece, without straying from what you wanted to portray. That's not easily done. And the ending was rather, unexpected. Great job! ^_^

[natzky]

"Looking around seeing nothing but hypocrisy
Hidden behind the lies in our so called democracy"
i really love these first two lines...so ironic...
this is really awesome, such an eye opener for us and the rhyming is excellent..;)

[Tattered Teddy]

Very lovely. I love the part that says ...

"You’ll just sit there and die
Reluctantly I’ll cry
And as you let your soul fly
I’ll silently sigh"

[ewest1220]

Interesting ending, I like it!