Everything

So I’m just left here with

Just about nothing to

Treasure

 

“Cause everything will start again anew
Cause everything just goes away my friend
And every king knows it to be true
That every kingdom must one day come to an end”

 

Seems everything that

Remains

Somehow keeps getting

Me down again

 

And I’ll still sing

Outside your window

In the spring

 

You’ll hear

And you’ll show me the

Love that you’ve given these

Past months

 

“I really feel bad for you with the depression and all”

What the f**k

What the actual f**k

 

I do not need your pity

I’m trying hard to stay afloat

 

But alas thou are nothing but a

Unintelligent part of my generation

 

The field in my dreams seems

So much clearer now

 

One lily stands out amidst

The rest

Tall and strong

 

So alike me

Yet so completely different

 

Makes me seem small

Makes me seem like a stone

Solid in keeping to myself

 

And this sun has long been set

It’s so dark

 

I AM SO SCARED

 

What if they all die tomorrow?

Everyone I care for

That’s what this darkness means to me

Signs of death

Signs of putrid hatred

All pointed at me

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

But here you go

Let me put it this way

 

I hate you too

All of you

 

I’m impervious to you sharp tongues  

To your hard fists

 

But you’ll someday taste the blood from

The wounds that my tongue inflicts

 

Because I’ll make the

Poisonous words that I

Spit rain down on you

 

That and

Then the fact that I’m just a

Really huge tad more

Intelligent than all of you

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

But finally I’ll pass

I’ll just pass out

 

Leaving everyone to hate me

Leaving no one to miss me

 

So to this lily of the dream

I love you

With me

I love the idea of you coming with me forever

 

But silently I feel myself falling.

 

Finally feeling rested enough for

My coffin to close

 

This is my final thought

Author's Note

Review please.
Need the constructive critisism

Reviews

[Tattered Teddy]

I have felt this way so many times. I love the way you spaced it. I also love the rawness of emotion shown here.

[stars are far]

that was very beautiful..
i really liked it ..
well done..

[White_lily]

A very beaytiful poem, very deep :)

[Namelezz]

I love this, last part must be to Natalia? :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting set-up of the poem. I like the direct and strong thoughts in the poem. Life is fair. We learn too late to appreciate the good people in our life. I like the way you led the reader into thoughts and I like the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ama May Cooper]

The big gaps distracted me from my reading and had me wondering what there aim was. They seem to add nothing and merely destroy the power in your poem by breaking it up and making it seem insignificant.
The actual content is very well written , a vivid and un-fading scence of anger that builds and climax's toward the end of the poem. Your wording is fantastic, and it is clear that you can weave the words of your tounge so very well on paper.
A sad tale of torment and self destroying , self hatrid. You expose your protagonist , laying him open and bare , as easily read as a book for all the misery that is presented to us hear.
A very depressing tale, woven with true attention to detail. Well done.

[ewest1220]

I enjoy the shift in attitude however I'm not sure if the big gaps are really needed. They kind of detract from the work in my opinion. Plus lets face it if you put it in a book there'd be like 2 blank pages lol food for thought. I really did like it though you're works are filled with a very upfront and brutal honesty I enjoyed reading this!

[Justin Flume]

Thanks man.
I know with the gaps..
It sorta fucked me a bit there.
But thanks E.

[ewest1220]

No thanks needed my friend I really enjoyed this piece!

[Justin Flume]

I am really deeply touched by you wanting to comment. So i'll thank you anyway :P