•|• Thought's Ship •|•

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Standing on the edge,

Of my thought's ship,

Trying to hold on,

My life's loosing grip.

Sailing through the sea,

Of emotions and deeds,

Some goods some bads,

Some wise and some greeds.

Taking small sips,

Of the emotions I choose,

Making choice by soul,

And setting my heart loose.

Here goes humanity,

Inside me sip by sip,

It makes me a good human,

From toe to tip.

Here I vomit out,

Envy and hatred,

True internal stability,

By this I get.

Now the turn of faith,

That I took out from depth,

Faith towards almighty,

And his people I get.

Then goes out temptations,

From the core of me,

This makes me wiser,

Like everyone should really be.

Likewise I sipped all,

The goods from the sea,

And while sailing through life,

I found the BETTER ME !!

Reviews

[Jamestown]

Great flowing write, with amazing wording and message!
The metaphor use is great and the fluency is flawless:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Thanks a lot sir.
m glad that u liked it.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!!
effortless rhyme........
valuable emotions.....
i loved it!!!
:)

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Thank You Sir ... :) for reading and sharing ur thoughts about it...

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome..............!!! :) :)

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Great write.... loved the flow with which you wrote this one and also the message behind this one... good one...

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

thank you sir!!

[R Smith]

that's great Amulya, excellent rhyme's and flows along at lightening pace, a poem to be proud of, well done :)

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Thaank You Sir!!! these words mean a lot!! Thank you!!

[luvs2write]

This is really cool! I like the story it told and at the same time you managed to keep a nice rhythm. I love the ending too...=)

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Thanks a tonn mate !!

[The Dark Knight]

One of the best from u.. always love to read ur work.. great.. the this one is just too gud.. loved it..

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Thanks a lot dear !!! U made me smile !!

[The Dark Knight]

its my pleasure tht i made u smile :)