Ten Times

Loving heart and Deep trust....once broken...can never be back as before!!

Ten times you lied
Ten times you betrayed
Ten times I tried
Ten times I strayed

I never came to know
That I am living a fake dream
Sailing blindly through your
'NEVER-TRUE' words' stream

I kept on writing.replies
Of your 'NEVER-SENT' letters
I died several lives
But to you it doesn't matters

In painting the world full
Of the love you 'NEVER-DID'
I lost my colours of life
And got faded in admist

I wore a smile always
To hide my pain and tear
As your concern towards me
Was 'NEVER-FELT' and unclear

With you I wanted to
Share my rains of joy
But you used me as a tool
And threw away like a toy

Ten times I mended you
Ten times you broke me down
By leaving my heart alone
In blue with reasons to frown!!

Reviews

[Pushkar Prabhat]

yes, love hurts..........efficient portrayal!!!
i kind of felt like this was translated from hindi........if so, please share that poem too......
anyways
i liked it!!!
:)

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethi..]

This is lovely write-up, I give it to you. But kindly do accept a small correction(I'm sorry:P). In the third para, last line... you say 'doesn't matters'... it can't come like that.... It should be 'doesn't matter' and you can also change 'letters' to 'letter' in the second line of the same para to keep it rhyming. I'm sorry if I'm wrong.. that is a small thing I noticed in an otherwise good song.

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Hehe thank you!! N lol its okyy... I don't.mind accepting these thngz!! As far as u r right :P

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

correction..."A VERY good song:)"

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Lol THANK YOU SIR!!

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

I do accept that a loving heart once broken is very difficult to be back as before. Improbable yes, impossible No. It depends on who you give to for repair.... Certain people have the ability to bring it back as new, maybe even better:)

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

May be!! Well I had.nt.met someone.like that yet!! Whn I will..who knows
..I'll be here posting love poems! Hehe :P

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

All the best :) then...

[Kuldeep desai]

Actually this is the second one of ur work that I have read I can sense some kind of pattern in your writing it's good actually, ur way of bringing the poem from start to end is quite impressive....

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Thanks a lot sir!

[Happy hours]

seems like someone hurts you real bad...but don't worry dear let time heal all your wounds...nicely penned... :)

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Umm yes!! I wud say...somethings r neva meant to be... n its just one of those thngz!! THANK YOU ANSHUL!!

[luvs2write]

I really enjoyed reading this, it has a nice flow to it. So many people are trying to prove themselves to gain acceptance....but really the best thing to do is just be you. If someone doesn't like who you really are, then they aren't worth your time. Very good poem....keep writing!!

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Thanks A lot!! This means a lot to me!!

[R Smith]

the broken dream of love, the one who lies and breaks all trust, you use pain and create light, its a thing of mine to use a negative and make it a positive, if you have lost love then write about it and make a great poem, you turn the negative loss into the positive writing, your poem is a classic example of how to do this, those NEVER SENT letters, an absolute masterpiece of poetry Amulya, perfect :)

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Thank you so.mch dear!!! Your words made me delighted...thnk you!!