Aquarius

The complexity of loving someone who is miles away from you. Not having them next to you like before. The agony feeling of questioning if they miss you too.

I'll try to
If I can.
I'll love you
If you do.
I'll sleep
If I am tired.
I'll love you
If you do.
I'll smile
If I'm not sad
I'll stay mad
If you don't care
But
I'll love you
If you do.
I'll greet you
If you say hello
I'll say goodnight
If you stayed
I'll be with you forever
Because
I'll love you
If you do
I'll miss you
If I have to
Or I'll miss you
If you do
I'll think of no one
If you think only of me
And I'll love you
If you do
I'll never wonder
If you didn't
I'll never love
If you love me
Despite it all
Despite the distance
I'll love you
And I'll love you
For you

Author's Note

Kinda feel like I'm being a cry baby.
Freely criticize :)

Reviews

[AliceBarnes]

I really enjoyed the rhythm and flow of this poem. Since being on writers cafe I have found that I have been reading poems more than usual. I loved this! I may not be a professional writer, but I knew straight away from the first few lines that I was going to love this poem. The short lines really made it for me, how you so elegantly made them flow, and then the repeated I'll love you if you do, I have always loved that kind of repetition in poems. Overall, this was a very well written poem that I can tell you put a lot of effort into.

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That's an awesome write about the true concept of what love really is:)

[aj milton]

I can totally relate to this. And the apparently simple style delivers a strong impact. Nice.

[Relic]

Like hanging on the precipice of his answers. The hoping is what resonates with this one.

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If i am professional critic i will find few weak points . But I am simply not. I like your form words are falling like your story. Just few words can let reader wonder and also can feel your love forward to one soul. Love is more important then art. I like it.