God Loves You

True story about a unbeliever friend who is broken inside.

Behind the bathroom door you’re crying

And I hate it

I don’t know why you’re doing it

You never tell me

You’re broken and empty inside

And you’re killing me

With all this secrecy

You’re always reapplying makeup to those

Watery crying eyes

And staring into that mirror

I don’t know why

You’re beautiful

You should know that

But you don’t and

It’s killing me

And I hate it

I’m afraid someone is hurting you

With words they shouldn’t say

Something deep inside

Is eating your soul away

I hate when you talk of dying

Of suicide and hell

Because I want you to stay alive

And know there’s a heaven

You’re beautiful

You’re moving away to someplace

I wish I could go with you

But just know that I love you

And that

God loves you.

He can save you.

He loves you.

 

Author's Note

Unedited, of course. I know it's super repetitive, but this is another kind of "writing frenzy." Just wrote what I felt. This girl really needs help, and I can't give it to her anymore cause she's leaving. I think I will give this to her.

Reviews

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

This is a heartfelt and genuine plea to a friend and it reveals how much you love her. It truly is heartbreaking when someone we care about is hurting and we are helpless to help. You wrote this in a way that is not judgmental or preachy, it gently expresses your concern and love...I can almost hear your tears.
As to your author's note comments: I do not know this girl or your relationship, but if she is leaving this may be your last chance to share your feelings with her. Your words written here could be something she could have to remind her that she is cared about. Perhaps someday, if not now, she will pick them up and gather strength. In that moment and beyond, they could make all the difference. I am assuming that even though she is leaving (I assume moving away) that she will have a way to get in touch with you should she ever want to reach out. Don't worry if it seems to make no difference immediately. Give it to her and keep her in your prayers and heart...miracles do happen. Sometimes along the way we are sowing seeds that someone else will see burst the soil.

[The Scholar]

Aww... this is beautiful. I love how well you are able to convey -- through this poem -- your overwhelming desire for her to be happy. Unedited or not, repetitive or not, this is a genuine piece written from the heart, and I admire you for it.
Let's face it... there are times for everyone when life sucks. But we have to keep fighting and look for that light at the end of the tunnel, no matter how small and far away it seems. I think giving this poem to the girl is so sweet. Let me know how it goes. And even if she doesn't like it, never give up trying.

Wonderful poem written straight from the heart, and no matter the skill of the poet, that's all anyone could ever ask for.


God bless. :)

Scholar

[emman]

I like the three last lines :) nice! :)))))