Hunger!

I don't know what came into me to write this kind of poem.Anyway just tel me what you think. :)

Hunger!The need!
Need of stealing what's not yours
Life force.Energy.
It's not yours to take.
But I want it!I want it so badly
I want to feel it,coming inside of me
I want to take it.Imbrace it.
It's calling me.I can hear it,the sweet sound
Enchanting melody
Is it so bad? I wonder
Can I just smell it?-little satisfaction of mine.

Every piece of my body it's telling me-go for it
It's right in front of YOU,take it IN,don't let it go
DRAIN it out,feel it, fullfill your needs
It's in your hands.Take it.TAKE IT!

THE NEED!
It's too loud.Too demanding.
If I could just...
Just a little bit of...
...oh yes...
It will do just fine.

Reviews

[Carl Drake Barnard]

What a fascinating piece!! I could feel your words and your craving need.your words share an incredible strong longing! I loved this you captured your feelings really well and created a beautiful vivid picture! Hmm the need!! Yummy ;) well done Poetess well done indeed!!

[Frieda P]

There's a certain frenzy to your words as I read this aloud....an oddly creative write, in a good way!

[-Scribe in Style-]

AWESOME! I can totally feel the hunger need! The short phrases and the punctuation that give it pauses are super! It so well written! Great work!

[Muse]

Hungry? When was the last time the poor thing got fed? Lol, I'm inviting you over for a four course meal..interested?

[spiritwind]

I like your style... you bring color, type set, spatial arrangement into your palette... well done... certainly describes WANTING, NEEDING, and DEMANDING

[Blue Ivory]

Omg I love it! This is very imaginative and creative. I like this sudden change of styles! Most people can't handle it and end up losing quality, but you did a great job! It's very smooth writing on your part. Well done!

[UnderCompulsion]

Thank you

[UnderCompulsion]

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