Canopy of Weeds

When what you most value is taken from you.

Coward.
Usurper of light.
A bright, nauseating personality,
Fueled by the love of others.
You have no innate beauty.
You consume the beauty in others
Twisting, mutating
into something perverse

A mockery of true beauty.
You are no great being.
Just an eroded golem.

Your shoulders burdened by the immense load
Of your sadness. Your melancholy is
Your most troublesome load.
Allow me
To take your load.
My knees are only broken.
My back only raw.
It only hurts to inhale

And exhale.

I’m happy to help
The one who stole my light,
My love. You took a sledge to my shins.
Flogged my back,
For what? Being an individual?
Trying to enjoy a little of the remaining light?
You bludgeoned me, your only competitor.
A delicate surface flower, hoping for a single ray of light
But the canopy above seizes every beam,
Squanders it on self-preservation.
Symbiosis is the answer, but you’ve slain you’re entire support system.

Think you can hoard the light?
Think you can have it all to yourself?
Go ahead and try. But soon you’ll see.
The sun will scorch your roots,
And you’ll fall,
Like a giant oak, crashing into earth.
And the undergrowth will prevail.

Reviews

[Vesa Lee]

Wow (and I don't us that expression often when reviewing).
When I say it hurt even to read I'm not kidding. That was -excruciating-.
>>>>>
Allow me
To take your load.
My knees are only broken.
My back only raw.
It only hurts to inhale
>>>>>
This stirred some pretty complex feelings to be sure, but not all painful. And yet "beautiful" seems such a poor word to define it. Reread it and still can't put it into words. Just brilliant. Going in my favorites.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

Amazing! This one is my fave of yours so far

100/100

[Fabric Pulse]

Think you can hoard the light?
Think you can have it all to yourself?
Go ahead and try. But soon you’ll see.
The sun will scorch your roots
~~~~~My favorite lines. The emotion is passionate and the fire is burning!

[Lowesy]

well this was bloody awesome! thoroughly enjoyed the way you described this person as a tree compared to the undergrowth, how they think they are better than us but eventually their lack of sympathy for others will be their downfall. Powerful.
Mark