The BabySitter

A baby Sitters Worst Nightmare

"The Medways Want You to Baby sit there Child today, So i said Yes Is that Ok deer?" Asked Alex`s Mum.

"sure If i get paid" said Alex.

"of course" alex`s Mum replied.

Hey Im alex, Im an 15 Year old girl And this Is the story Of my worst nightmare... It all started When The Medway Family Phoned me to babysit there son. The Medways Liked To collect Things from all Over the world. Anyway lets carry on with the story.

I made my way to The medways house and knocked at the door. There House was Big and black.It had 3 windows and a tall Chimney. Mrs.Medway Opened The door While Putting her ear ring in. I stepped inside and looked at a giant clock in the hall way. I ran my finger across The top and when i looked My finger was covered Is dust.

"Thanks for This, My Number on the fridge and The babys asleep In the living room" 

I nodded and watched her leave. She came back in and came up to me, "i forgot to tell You Dont Feed the baby Orange Juice He becomes urm..Sick.." then i watched her walk out again. I sat on the couch and watched tv. The phone rang. I answered And a man started talking. I just said i wasn't interested and hung up. The baby opened One eye and started crying. I took Him Out his cot and let him crawl around. After about an hour i heard hi crying. He was sitting next to a clown statue. It was tall and had big red shoes. Its eyes Were to realistic. I picked up the baby and rang Mrs.Medway. "hello Erm The baby's Crying About Your clown Statue Should i Move it?" 

"what?" She replied

"Your baby's crying About Your clown statue Should i move it?" 

"Im sorry but we don't Have a clown Statue..."

My heart sank. I was now shaking... I heard a smash in the other room. 

" Mrs.medway...call the police quick" i Whispered.

She hung up...

I slowly Opened the door In the kitchen a tiny bit and looked through. The Statue had gone... 

I looked round and turned the handle Of the back door. It was locked. I quickly ran to the Drawer And pulled out the keys. I Jammed them into the door and opened It. the garden Was sealed out by a large fence. I looked over it and on the other side was a bush. I carefully Put The baby on the bushes then i jumped over it. I Picked Up the baby and ran home...i tripped. I heard Someone or something was walking towards me and grabbed my leg It pulled me into the bushes...

Author's Note

Hope u like it :)

Reviews

[The XYZ Writer]

The story was good but it really could have been better. One suggestion is the grammar and punctuation. You wouldn't believe how much easier it makes for the reader to read the story without grammar or punctuation mistakes. And they can appreciate the story more. But other than those, it was a good story.

[Wren]

it's good, but a bit of advice,
the spelling and grammar mistakes really pull it down, try and fix those
the story seems to move really quickly, try and slow down to get the reader more emotionally involved with the characters and what is happening,
Oher than that, nice story:)