:end:

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A word

climbing up a page

like a snake

slithering up a tree,

the snake of Eve,

ready to poison and taint

My word will be your undoing

it will be your downfall,

your nightmare.

For with words I can do anything:

I can strangle men

make them sleep

make them weep

and commit acts the likes of which

never would have been committed before.

The word

is my greatest power

and your biggest weakness;

I will take it

and drive it into your skull

as a nail

to rotten wood.

Your mind is decaying

crumbling

so eager to fall apart,

waiting for its undoing.

I will gladly be the one,

my words and I;

we will tear your rotting brain to pieces

Bit by bit

until you are nothing

less than the words that destroyed you

less than the cracks in the pavement

that people notice only to avoid

only to shun

only to ignore...

Like cracks and crevices you will be

empty of substance

empty of usefulness

devoid of meaning

You will be nothing

NOTHING

And I will have won a battle that was never fought

All because of my words

sneaking up my page and into

your heart

and your rotting brain

All because I tore you apart

with

a

word

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Author's Note

I haven't written in a while, this was the first step back into the writing world for me. Feedback would be greatly appreciated - thank you!

Reviews

[Calli]

I really liked the picture this painted and the intensity of both the highs and lows- the smooth, silky tones of writing combined with the harsh spasms of violence and revenge. I honestly have no recommendations to change this; it's perfect the way it is.

[Kaylee]

Thanks, my beautiful friend!

[Allen Wayne]

I really liked it! I am not a reviewer or judge of such things. But I just really liked it. Have a wonderful day!

[Frieda P]

Holy cats, sounds like you're a bit perturbed! Love so many lines in this potent write...

'I will take it
and drive it into your skull'

Much enjoyed this read and love the stache by the way!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Nicely done. You've shown us something here that feels very much like a little piece of the inside of your mind, which is extremely refreshing. I like the "train of thought" feel to this...my critical eye would say to edit yourself a bit--just go through and take out some of the unnecessaries to tighten it up a bit. However, my uncritical and unaltered eye says "to hell with it", this moved me even if it isn't technically perfected. Nicely done, I enjoyed it.

[Zap-the-awesome]

Whoa. That was neat, original, interesting... Yeah. Good stuff!

[Lonely Islander]

Oh wow...really the things words can do. You know they say that words are sharper than a sword or something like that. I enjoyed reading the whole poem but the first paragraph was definitely my favorite:-):-):-D.

[Elvis Gilley]

I found your ability to write very powerful. It has been rare for me to find poets that have the vocabulary that you posses and the have the power in their tone. I loved it. The subject was great but I felt you sold yourself a little short with the "brains" word choice. You have such strong wording and to me this seems a bit out of place. Keep up the good work.

[Jack...]

I think it carries a strong message to whoever it was written about (if that is then cae). You definitely got your point across, that's for sure. very nicely done.