I tread

I tread

A Poem by Blackheart

I tread
Tread this broken earth
This sphere of fallacy
This dying eden of mankind

I see the horizon gazing at me
Looming amidst waves of smog
The ever bustling crowd
Man and machines. Hand on hand
Striving for utopia

I leave my carnal desires
I shed my skin, leave my scales behind
I leave no legacy behind for the world to see
No statues and busts in my name
No songs of praise
No tales or lore

Bright lies the morning star
Angel of the dawn
The sky is cold and silver
Peaceful and calm
The heavens are alight
With countless diamonds to see

A momentary instance of epiphany
Engulfs this fragile mind
A gale of thoughts inbound
Hits the shores of the brain
Visuals of the distant past
Embers of dreams once alive
Statics of words once said

The void feels nearby
The eden of eternal limbo
The dividing line
The final destination for all

And I tread
I tread this broken earth

© 2016 Blackheart


Author's Note

Blackheart
A full piece of poetry after a long time. I know this poem is dark, depressing, nihilistic but this is just a piece of fiction. A fragment of imagination.

Your precious reviews/suggestions/corrections are always welcome.

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I love the phrase mankind a dying Eden. It really puts a time frame on our time here in a way that is equal parts terrifying and deplorable. You do a wonderful job of capturing the contempt of man in this poem. As John C Chill said, it does have a song's sense to it. I could see a bard singing this in a tavern of a medieval world scape you might craft!! Nice poem, Blackheart!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blackheart

8 Years Ago

So glad you could see the resemblance Zyle. Indeed, mankind treads to all places possible. Sometimes.. read more
Zyle Christian William Cook

8 Years Ago

Unfortunate but true.



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And aren't we a broken race to have tread and destroyed this once unbroken earth? Life and the world around can make us feel hapless and hopeless but we walk along- a boulevard of broken dreams? This is a very evocative piece of writing and I am pleased to see it is not unhinged at any point. Keep up the good work but don't stop having hope. Cheers.

Posted 6 Years Ago


it's dark but beautiful at the same time
which is shows the art of your work
very nicely written

Posted 8 Years Ago


Good poem. I like the deep insight to the struggles and hope we carry with us here till it ends. Thanks for a good read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Blackheart

8 Years Ago

Glad you liked it! Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Honest rather than dark, I think. We all tread this broken earth. The poem itself is wonderfully written with lovely use of words.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Blackheart

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for understanding it. Glad you stopped by.
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mou
very nice and heart touching one......

Posted 8 Years Ago


Blackheart

8 Years Ago

Thank you mou.
Dark,poignant and magical,definately the best poem that i have read today,very brilliant

Posted 8 Years Ago


Blackheart

8 Years Ago

Thank you Mary for your kind words. Glad you stopped by! :)
Mary Helda

8 Years Ago

you are welcome
Hell or heaven. We shall find our ending. Payment will be due.
"The void feels nearby
The eden of eternal limbo
The dividing line
The final destination for all"
I liked the above lines and the truth in the words. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


Blackheart

8 Years Ago

What takes birth, shall leave this realm as well. Glade you liked this poem Coyote. And thanks a lot.. read more
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
I like it it's pretty.

I'm impressed, keep up the good work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Blackheart

8 Years Ago

Glad you liked it. Thanks for stopping by!
This is gorgeous and infinite. We are all born in Eden and it shatters upon our awakening...then our journey is the way back to wholeness.
This has inspired a poem and I will mention you in the comments

Posted 8 Years Ago


Blackheart

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for understanding softlyfall. And yes, do mention the poem please. I will be happy.. read more
I love the phrase mankind a dying Eden. It really puts a time frame on our time here in a way that is equal parts terrifying and deplorable. You do a wonderful job of capturing the contempt of man in this poem. As John C Chill said, it does have a song's sense to it. I could see a bard singing this in a tavern of a medieval world scape you might craft!! Nice poem, Blackheart!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blackheart

8 Years Ago

So glad you could see the resemblance Zyle. Indeed, mankind treads to all places possible. Sometimes.. read more
Zyle Christian William Cook

8 Years Ago

Unfortunate but true.

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Tags: nihilism, dark poetry, death, void, life, loss, thoughts

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Blackheart

Tezpur, India



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