Promises

A song that I have perfectly in my head that goes along with an acoustic guitar. Hopefully the readers will hear it while reading, as well.

When I told you I would go as far
To stay with you, wherever you are
We both were young and we weren't so smart
But still, I kept it sound in my heart

Your hand in mine, we stood so high
Our hearts were beating like rain in the sky
I turned and I said to you “Where do we go now?”
You smiled and you said to me “The real question’s ‘how?’”

The journeys we made together those years
The love, the scars, the hot shedding tears
They broke us and built us under God’s great blue skies
You’ve seen me at best and seen through the lies

Well, I’ve kept my promise, solid and stilled
When we meet again, will your promise be filled?
I’ll gaze through your mournful eyes
And point out the memories deep in those skies

You’re made for me, you’re made for me
Oh, how I hope and I breathe the stories we’ll make and weave
So youthful, so happy, you and me
Oh, how I long and dream that you’ll be the one for me
Promises we will keep that pass by with faithful leaps
Please, oh, my dear,
Remember I’m near.

Reviews

[WordNerd]

WOW beautiful cloud, keep the great work. Your extremely talented :D

[Liz]

I love this. It's simple, but packed with so much beauty and emotion. Very good job :)

[Aleyah]

I like this a lot, I can relate. This is simple, but pretty. The second stanza is my favorite...I feel like we all ask that question, because most of us have no clue where we're going. Pretty good flow, this made me sad and happy at the same time, a weird emotion, but still god. Beaut (:

[Murtuza]

I would really like to listen to it in song. It flows very well and has a nice feel of love too. Great write

[Gone]

This is so beautiful. You're an amazing poet.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Very good lyrics, Cloud.. heartfelt for me , i felt them ..
Beautiful - hope we can hear it some day.

Chloe

[MadeCheaply]

I can honestly say I cried when I reached the line "The real questions'how'". It was beautiful.

[brenda]

i love the feeling that you put throughout the poem!! it is really good!

[Alexis]

Awwwwww!! This is such a sweet song! It's really beautiful. It seems rather hopeful and possibly uplifting. I absolutely loved it. It flowed nicely, the rhyming was good and it made sense (some rhyming just doesn't make sense and it's completely off topic because the writer is just trying to find a word. But you didn't so that!) You did an amazing job!

[Emunah June.]

Woah. This piece is full of emotion. You did a great job with the vivid imagery.