Desire

Seductive aura
Spiced
Furrowed auburn
Honey drips
From Moonlight's pale eye
Driven by ecstasy
Outcasted
By good nature
Sense
Calls out invectives
Yet deafened and blinded
By lust
Mute bird calls
Sing of passion
Lawless desire
Flames
Fanned by fervor
Intensely gnaws
Quivered in awe of elation
Fiery hunger
Quickens
Til the point of cries
Craving remains
Everlasting

Author's Note

This is not my usual. I'd like to expand my limits. Tell me your honest opinion.

Reviews

[Mistaken]

wow this is awesome! :D

[Kat Plunkett]

Well, I like it (:

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

intricately detailed~ in the brevity of lines there is pure movement to relate the emotives moving through the poetic~

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem. I like the words. You create a powerful poem with so few words. Desire can take us to great heights and dreams. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[DeathByChoice]

My favorite part:
"Mute bird calls
Sing of passion"
It just kind of sets the poem apart from any other "desire" poems I've ever read and makes iit kind of unique. All in all: very nice piece!

[Justin]

Very nice, you managed to keep it very simple, yet sophisticated at the same time, and pulled it off very well!! Good job Cloud :)

[nono]

This is very descriptive and very different from other things i have read. I like it very nice job!

[Brandon]

this is amazing great work



100/100