Please

This is a rant. No rhyme, no rhythm... I just wanted to get it out.

Please
I know I might've not been helpful lately
Or your life maybe isn't going good
But when you say you're going out
To clear your mind of all the stress
When you feel better...
Please come back home
I promise I'll change
I promise I'll be there
Your life will be easier
Maybe if I wasn't making you angry?
Or sad? Stressed?
Will you at least call me when you leave?
Or tell me how you are?
I can change myself, really
I'll change to make you come home
I know I might've made you angry lately
Or your life is getting too hard on you
But when you say you're leaving
To clear your mind of everything
When you feel better...
Please come back home
Please

Author's Note

True story...

Reviews

[WordNerd]

This is AWESOME :)

[Dr.Who.LOVER]

Wow I can relate to this. I've written something like this.

-VampireChick

[master squiggles]

This was very touching, I liked it. Very desperate and beautiful.

[tynamite]

I like this poem slash rant as it reminds me of relationships where people argue and don't understand each other. And one walks out the door leaving the other one upset. One person is ready to change and the other criticises. I've favourited it.

[Calypso]

This is a very beautiful, but painful poem. I hope you feel better soon.

[Anicca]

This sounded like a very desperate plea to me... Beautiful written. I hope everything worked out for you x

[Alicia Schroeder]

Rants are alway's good to get off your chest, and a sad rant it is, I hope he came home.

[Mr. Darkblood]

it is a rant indeed, but it's great for a first draft (correct me if its not, but that's the impression I got). I don't think you need to change anything about it! Great job

[Miss Coral]

Nice piece... the emotions in this are vivid, almost tangible and solid. The pleading tone to this is great and consistent.. nice phrasing too.

Great piece. I do hope everything worked itself out.


Coral

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

Very Beautiful rant Very well said and has a lovely Flow to it nice work.
Hope every thing is well with
you my friend God bless and Take
care