Breaking Point

A song. Imagine it like a Three Days Grace song.

(A)
Its become clear to me
The love I thought would be
Was a mistake

You drive me up the wall
I'd thought I'd seen it all
Till you came near

Its all a game to you
The way you beckon me
Its driving me insa-ane


(CHORUS)
My breaking point is boiling near
My blood's on fire when I hear your words
You lead me in then break me down
Submerged in your control I'm left to drown

You drive me insa-a-ane

Its not o-ver till I give myself away
You won't let go till I break my heart away
You have the key
I'm in the cell
But I'm so submerged you can't te-ll


(B)
I've now begun to cease
I know you won't release
Until I break

My world will fade away
When things don't go your way
What do you want?

Its all a game to you
The way you beckon me
Its driving me insa-ane


(CHORUS)


Its all a game to you
The way you destroy me
Its driving me to my-
Breaking Point

Reviews

[Drifter]

Not bad at all. I like three days grace, especially their debut album, and I can see this sung along their rhythmic style. I agree with suggestions about the second line of the chorus. It just sounds better the other way. Other than that, not too shabby at all.

[PaperHearts]

Great lyrics! I really loved your chorus, and I thought that the lyrics in your verses fit in perfectly with the main message in your chorus. The repetition of the line 'Its driving me insa-ane' was really effective, and I could only but imagine how powerful that would come across as in melodic form. Three Days Grace would be perfect. :D
~PaperHearts

[Mr. Darkblood]

It is much like a Three Days Grace song :)
I liked it, it was better than any song I could write. I just have one teeny suggestion:

Change "your words I hear" in the second line of the chorus to "I hear your words", it just feels better to me. But then again, I do read songs a lot poetry.

[Red Crown]

I like the lyrics :D It would give a great sound, really. But I don't know how you wanted it to sound like xD

[Coyote Poetry]

Such wonderful words and music. I like these words. The poem told a good story of love danger and the desire overtaking common sense. I like the complete poem. Just need some music with the words. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sarah>_>]

I wish I knew what it sounded like :(

[Forever Mine]

Wow... I really want to hear this song now lol. I could totally see Three Days Grace or another band doing this. Great job : )

[R E Tree]

Beautiful song. I can imagine this been song by a gentle loving voice thats just crying for help or even searching for revenge. I can sense a lot of anger in this and that anger carried out through the poem making it sound very fiery and enjoyable for the reader

[TheKaylaPup]

with all songs, i wanna hear it now. Good job. it would be awesome if three days grace did this song. I would so buy it.

[Senseless whatever]

Good write! The piece flows nicely and I had about two or three different sounds when reading this.