Sweetly Broken

So-called "friend".

The steps I'm taking on a bloody path,
Risks apt to crumble the ground I walk on
An axe to split every single visible lath,
Uneasy to whether I'll live until dawn.

Every way I inch, unsure what'll come,
You'll break me surely if I'm caught
The pain that's turning my heart so numb,
Appears with the sweetness that I sought.

You hold back anger with a small cold smile,
And turn to the large wandering crowd
My heart torn out for you to reconcile,
You declare my blunder, tall and loud.

I'm left for the wolves, bloody and ripped apart,
My mistakes revealed openly to the world
A lesson I learn for handing you my heart
My puppet strings around your finger, twirled.

I stand lonesome again without my pride,
The person I loved shot a knife through my throat
The human I was has been thoroughly tried,
"The deed has been done," the letter now wrote.
 

Author's Note

I don't like the last line... Don't comment on it.

Reviews

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

so much Emotion Amazing job i love it. thank you for sharing God bless

[PaperHearts]

Your writing never fails to amaze me! :) You have an incredible instinct when it comes to your choice of vocabulary, and the way you crafted the words in this piece really affected the overall execution of your idea. I thought that you had a strong sense of emotion, story, and imagery, and everything really seemed to come together perfectly. There were moments where I was a little unsure about the rhyming scheme, but maybe that was just due to how I was reading it in my head? Haha, i really don't know. But overall, I thought this was a spectacular write. Dark, intense, and amazingly written. :)
~PaperHearts

[kelly]

like it. once again good job.

[Senseless whatever]

Outstanding poem. The last line is a great ending so what you don't like it leave it alone. Great visuals and emotionally charged.

[Dupree]

This is an excellent poem. Packed with emotion. Very impressive and the reader is able to relate to what you mean. It is a rather cold poem but it reveals a brutal truth, one that we all must learn.

[Keevan]

this is a cold and powerful poem, packed with emotion. wonderful job.

[_thesovo]

:O! THIS IS AWESOMEEE!!!