My Love

Ah, a sonnet I wrote in class... It seems I have unlimited inspiration when my love is in the same room.

To come and lay down words is but a task,
A life without you means but my defeat
To love someone behind their plastic mask,
Sweet words become a puzzle, now complete.

Desire doth now cloud my sight and mind,
A painted work compares to bursting love
It seems as now the stars become aligned,
I wouldn't doubt a song leaks from above.

A melody from Heaven will seem dark,
When all the earth wakes from it's little dream,
The seraphs call for worlds to pause and hark,
Just to see your face, a radiant beam.

God calls for quiet when you speak a word,
There's nothing you will say that won't be heard.

Author's Note

If you aren't aware, a sonnet is three quatrains and a couplet of iambic pentameter.
Basically three stanzas with four lines each, and one stanza with two lines. The rhyming pattern is ABAB CDCD EFEF GG.

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

Wow! This was an amazingly inspired piece. I loved how free flowing your poem was, yet how well you did in sticking to the structure of a sonnet. I thought that you did really well in expressing your thoughts and emotions through the right choice of words, and always remaining heartfelt and genuine. I loved the last to lines. :) Great write,
~PaperHearts

[TheKaylaPup]

very nice, your love must be some inspiration. Altogether a lovely piece.

[Dupree]

This is a great work. Amazing use of the form. Very impressive word usage. Through and through quite impressive.

[hyancynthstofeedthysoul]

You are correct as to a Shakespearean sonnet. However that is only one of many forms. Others include * Petrarchan sonnet: "ABBA ABBA CDE CDE" or "ABBA ABBA CDC DCD", Spenserian sonnet: "ABAB BCBC CDCD EE", Onegin stanzas: "aBaBccDDeFFeGG" with the lowercase letters representing feminine rhymes and the uppercase representing masculine rhymes, written in iambic tetrameter. I thought you might like to know.

[Jess.]

WOW. I am again amazed at your talent, and wisdom. This is an outstanding piece, not an imperfection in site.
My new favorite piece from you.

[AmeliaMae]

I really liked this! And I love sonnets. It was very sweet and a very good write.

[Daydreamer54]

Thanx for the literacy lesson! XD I didn't mean that in a bad way, but i did lean something new. Great poem! it was very sweet and cute! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the feel and format of this poem. You done well with the sonnet. Take patience and talent to write to a format. I like the poem. Written with a feel of the writers of love from the past. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Kanattas Atir Enomo]

wow this was a powerful sonnet. very well written and it flowed nicely. i love the meaning behind this. it's a beautiful piece and i absolutely love it. great job

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought this was nice. I hate sonnets though. I have only written one because I had to write it for class. It is a whole bunch of questions. Well good write thanks for sharing. :)