Cowardice

You lie in peace

As the damnable creature rattles its cage

But why would you ever listen, 

Why would you care to wake?

Dreams are safer than unleashing

The claws that lie in the corner

Why would you care 

To delve into reality,

Return to the friend

You set your demon on daily,

Return to the friend 

That has given up on you,

Return to the mind

That has given up on life?

Truth is,

The demon is loyal to you only.

Author's Note

It's interesting how the mind can dredge up problems in writing that the anchor didn't even know they had.

Reviews

[Seshat Nidaba]

As the biggest coward known to my corner of society, I endorse this poem. No really I thought it spoke truth, how many are the escapes we choose, but I think that's in part because we realize society is based on collective illusions and myths to the degree that even money, the center of what we call 'reality' is something totally made up by human beings to control each other.

Sorry, I rant. The best lines for me were: 1. Dreams are safer than unleashing
The claws that lie in the corner


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[Cool Handless Luke]

Why would you care
To delve into reality,
Return to the friend
You set your demon on daily,
Return to the friend
That has given up on you,
Return to the mind
That has given up on life?

Truth is,
The demon is loyal to you only.

Author's note included I am very impressed with your words here. Thought provoking and creative. I'm glad I happened upon your page tonight. Some good writing to be found here!

[revalatia]

Something everyone seems to struggle with in some way.. i like it

[Libby McKeown]

The last stanza makes the entire poem, hands down.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Isnt it amazing how we writers can come up with things that we dont even know what the meaning is until it is written? Our minds are an interesting thing. Nicely done!

[Ruth]

I love the title and the ending leads the reader to be thoughtful...well thought out love, a powerful piece xoxo

[Kim]

Such a captivating piece here, I really enjoyed this.

[Moflo]

This was captivating, I think it pulls the reader in pretty nicely. I liked how the pacing seemed to pick up in the second stanza as well, it sets the ending up nicely. Good work.

[Walk away slow poet]

Such a powerful write here, nicely written

[Muse]

Oooh this is good. And I really loved the last line! My only critique is to maybe leave off the comas...the line breaks are enough to make the reader pause. It was Derek Elliot that told me about this...and I really do agree with him. Let the first stanza become a continuus flow to the next. If you want a longer pause...that's when you space twice. So what I'm saying is...don't let all the comas, periods, and question marks become a destraction to your beautiful penning. xo

[Break The Broken]

i love this one, i loved how the creature could be a friend like you said or something that bothers you like if you never had closure with someone. and the ending: Truth is,
The demon is loyal to you only
ways a great ending, sealed the deal, yet still kept it open to interpuatate as people wish. great write i love it!