Monotony

You curl up on your bathroom floor

Just hoping for today to end

Maybe tomorrow you’ll make an effort

 

Dragging yourself through preparations

(Without realizing what you are preparing for)

Only to look back on the pointlessness of another today

And look forward to the monotony of another tomorrow

 

You don’t pride yourself on the uniformity of your daily chocolate chip waffles

No pride in falling asleep in fourth period (EVERY fourth period)

No pride in sitting alone in the shade, humming melancholy tunes where no one can hear

No pride in wishing someone could

 

Sure, you can see my notes.

Of course I’ll get you lunch.

I’m just really tired.

There’s nothing wrong, you’re going crazy.

 

You curl up on your bathroom floor

Tears like unstoppable locomotives tearing down your cheeks

Wishing on all your life someone would see

Wishing someone would hear, maybe even listen

To the scared little girl

Hiding behind the mask of a warrior

Reviews

[Dove]

Wow, Oh my goodness this poem is brilliant! I felt like I was writing this haha it was just really good. I felt like I was actually listening to someone talking to me. The line about falling asleep in fourth period made my heart drop a little because I fall asleep every fourth period. So I feel like I can relate to this poem a lot.

[Arianna]

this poem is great, it really takes your trough the story. i like so many lines in it i cant even choose one that would be my favorite but the end just ties it all together. Brilliant.

[Sugar and Spice]

I love this! Full of emotion and pain. My heart felt so heavy reading this. I felt you were describing my life. You had it down to a t and I think thats what makes this such a special piece. The amazing reality of this that tugs on the heart-strings.
That last stanza, I loved how the first line was the same as the first line of the first stanza, it just tied it all in perfectly. The last stanza was amazing, great finish :)
Loved it!
~ Em

[Susanna F]

This is a touching portrayal of adolescent depression - whether hormone-related, clinical or due to trauma, most of us have been there and I can certainly relate. Fortunately, things get better. Wonderful poem.

[Break The Broken]

You curl up on your bathroom floor
Tears like unstoppable locomotives tearing down your cheeks
Wishing on all your life someone would see
Wishing someone would hear, maybe even listen
To the scared little girl
Hiding behind the mask of a warrior

i loved that part, wow that was amazing and very relatable! i love it!

[emma]

amazing! one of my favourite pieces i've read of yours.

it was a beautiful piece, and all of your words spoke volumes to me. it was just so nicley worded, and every line was just right, and I loved it so much. lovedlovedloved.

[Libby McKeown]

I like the humility of this work; I think we've all felt this way. I particularly enjoyed the imagery of the locomotive tears. It speaks to the still, grey shadow on my heart. Please keep sharing!

[Seshat Nidaba]

There was a magic line in this piece that I found superbly original!

1. You don’t pride yourself on the uniformity of your daily chocolate chip waffles

As orindary as it seems, this line was genius to me!

This combined emo and kiddie, in a way I find very mature, eloquent and respectable. nice work.

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Very creatively written piece in the mind of teenager in the schooling days. i cant tell you how many times I've felt this when I was in school. Nicely done.

~Anna Rose

[Pierre Aberrance]

Very creative and real. Easy to relate to for those who know.