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Please, please, please….no

A wave of horror rushed through
His eyes..
Rage[d|d]Anger
Mist in the awakening
Shadowing the Mass.K.cuLiNE
Features of his flesh
Devoured power – his power
Burning through
Her imposed respect
The catalyst

She shook her head….no

RevitalizeRetributionRespectively
Did you…did you do it
Like you said you would
We should – I could..?

Body heating up
Stripped of innocence
Moving closer
Forcing [force]
Pushing [scar.red]
Him back [in.SiDe]
More and more
Into the dark depths
Of the forest walls
tHoSE(that WMD)WooDs
Lost in [theforebodingfollicles] TrEEs
Light, moonlight, sparingly sprouting
Puddles across her
Batteredbloody skin
He frightened.figureless,
Enveloped [more.so] by HiS
Own [dark]ness
Than that of natures
Neglectful caress,
Shuttering, loathing in Regret

She wasn’t who she was
Or ever wanted to be
bButt.oOnn.tThiss.nNightt
She stood 67 inches high
Towering over the frame
Of the biggest
Dick
She had ever known,
Glorified in the Ressurected
Demeanor of her inner heroine
But still transfixed
In this world she grew up in
Quite alone besides
The company of him;
Her mentor, shelter, father;
Her life,
Appropriately Reassembled

Incapably.capable
In her inert approach
Ostensibly disconnected
She [made] him
Feeble.genuinely SoRreeY
But forgivness was no longer
An [theonly] option

He unknowingly.knowing
Transformed her
Into a homicidal.creature
The most insane of preachers
Into
Himself.myself.she.me.I
Had awakened

 

Author's Note

someone call the girl police..

Reviews

[Lauren Stegg]

Wow, I'm really impressed by your word play and alliteration techniques. Very well structured and paced.
As for the content, I'm blown away. The poem is so powerful, deeply enraged, and horrifically sad- a beautful piece.

[V]

Wow,
I have to say that your play with words offers such an insight into the meaning that you have placed on those words. Disecting the words in a, sometimes delicate, sometimes grotesque way. Giving emphasis to your meaning in such a great way.

Moving closer
Forcing [force]
Pushing [scar.red]
Him back [in.SiDe]
More and more

Makes it very powerful. Makes me feel it more on an emotional level, which works very effectively. Thanks for sharing this, the depth of it is sacred

There is so much in this... I had to read it several times, to really get into it... which I like
V.

[Racheal]

nice i really like this piece and where it went. People reap what they so and you father gets his just deserts in this. I love retribution as a concept and a reality.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This poem rocks.. so do you..
sad and angry poem ..

[Amanda Crandall]

I really really love how your style utilizess the american language. So many lines I can walk away from the poem thinking about! Good Job!