Tongue

Tongue

A Poem by eli mercuree rue

Tense and my heart is racing
Ostracized emotions leading me away from
Nostalgic embraces as I'm
Going down our bodies
Undulating, unenslaved, and uncontained; we are
Embedded in our own tantalizing transactions

© 2008 eli mercuree rue


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eli mercuree rue
yummy

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any poem that has the word "undulating" -- damn that's my favorite word, and the way you use it so cogently and with such emotional sensibility - gotta love language, and the ladies... bodies etc.,

g.

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

or something something

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you should come f*****g kidnap me already

no lauren

restraint

373
373
373
not too many right

Posted 17 Years Ago


i did

i do

i'm gonna

go play with her

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

go play with her ...
ha
ha
or something

ha

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

yes, lauren is cool
i love the un- alliteration. I'm such an alliteration w***e. really though.
transactions. great word.
and tantalizing- nice pairing. and it has a z- that's like extra points in scrabble.

the choice of "transaction" brings me to "The Traffic of Women: Notes on the
Political Economy of Sex", by gayle rubin. - it goes into gender systems and the domestication of women...kind of as a basis for going into some critical insight.... (and follows compulsory heterosexuality nicely)
women as raw materials...
that should be the next one:
raw materials
do it
i dare ya

and i gotta say
one more time
you're f*****g
brilliant...

what i'd give
to spend a moment
in your mind...

Posted 17 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Lovely , sensual, warm ,esctacy . Love it !
This is a little different than any of your other poems I have read but
just as good. This must be your softer side!

Peace

Posted 17 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

nice work. I like this piece and the way it all comes together in the last sentence. I am left with the impression that she is dealing with emotions that are detracting from her pleasure in her partner and their actions together.

Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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eli mercuree rue
eli mercuree rue

Durham, NC



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