Lamaj

With one glance into his eyes,

the fear concealed by my bravery,

invaded my spiritual mind, soul, and body,

as notions of sinister memories

evoked my sense of serenity;

myself, again,

being raped empty.

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

ugh
let's take this trip
together

Reviews

[lostintheworld]

I thikn bravery is an interesting word choice. Very telling. It's almost as if you are becoming the sacrificial lamb being led to slaughter and you put on your brave face knowing what will happen. Knowing about the death of spirit that will come when he rapes you. But theres confliction because you want to feel as though you are putting yourself in the situation- it gives you a little bit of power that way...you wanted attention, you wanted to be special- but it didn't have to happen this way. and the bravery doesnt last- it's not long before he's filling you up and draining you at the same time... (callous, my apologies- i find it necessary) I think bravery makes it sound like it was a noble action that you engaged in, in order to keep the peace, get what you needed (attention), not anger anyone, not BURDEN anyone.....
and you really want to feel brave- but you can't stay brave- because his eyes pierce your soul like his c**k did. and in the end, he didn't really care about YOU. If he did, he wouldnt have raped you, or taken advantage of you, or manipulated you into thinking you liked it, wanted it. His eyes leave you empty, the memories leave you empty because you know that it can't be justified as bravery anymore...


so yeah.
rape.
lamaj- jamal ... just saying so for the sake of saying it. voicing it.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

boylan gave you a great review, not much more to say beyond that. the simplicity of it works well, and speaks volumes. i especially enjoyed the ending.
nice piece, my dear

[Raef C. Boylan]

A lot more simplistic than your other work
and no less powerful
less fun
but i don't think this piece is meant to be fun
so that's okay

a re-acquaintance with a bad experience?
(durrr)
(spelt 'duh' in american i think)

lot of impact in this piece
there isn't a lot more to say
oh, wait: wow...
(being mean today, dunno why)

thanks for posting this
is kind of like catching LE
in calm still-frame
for just a second
before zapping back around
with blue monkeys and such

good piece

outtie

[Dawn Jones]

wow... I think that's all I have to say about this. Just wow.