coliz.un

Let's take a trip




back to the place where
cherry boulevard splits

and


sit down in our 'ittle reefah
seats, light a few and get
bent up |all transfixed, displaced|
from this place [mosey] to the

next

.laugh at me for saying 'mosey'.
I'll still let you go back with me
to that day when we sat on the
sidelines, because our legs were
too short and our brains to slow
to dodge the five red balls

coming

at us like ritalin and x, where
we sat waiting for the next
catch. pass|drop|hit to put us back
on the floor for round two or four
to score a few mates as we laughed
in the other teams face 'cause our
shortcomings were better.. or
at least we knew how to fix

them

each time we were allowed to step
on the wooden floor because that
was where the inner stuff that kept
us thriving was derived and the

con.sequences of ir.actions were
all conclusive 'ittle dabbles [dips]
diivess into nothing but retracted
innocence slipping and sliding across
our skin because no one actually knew
the diversion we were living or

where

to begin in trying to even name it
'twas a sin to be 'gainst what they
saw and did.. but time was traveling
freezing in their faces and the baby
who knew, was just pissing all around
causing a scene to be seen or maybe
she just had to pee and didn't know
how to not do it yet : whatever the matter,
the effect was still caused by the
unaffected |afterthought| 'i heart you'
and 'here is my card' dinner? yeah,
that prolly would have gotten a better

response

or some sort of revival.

 

 

 

Author's Note

ugh struggles

inever finished this did i?

Reviews

[.mate.feed.kill.repeat.]

The way it was written made me read it at amazing speed. Where it starts and where it finishes seem to be two completely unrelated realms, which is absolutely stunningly beautiful.
The rhythm and flow could not be more enticing.
-stix-

[Raef C. Boylan]

really really like this one
know i say it a lot
but this is a different style
so that makes my response different
and don't argue
got it?
yep

there's an air of performance to it
i'd love to hear ya
read it or rap it
spit it [OUT]

and i guess i like it
on principle
'cos other people's childhoods
intrigue me
and the more mundane the situation
like phys. ed (have i got that right?)
the more we are in
a collective head
of memories
and human nature
discoveries
for the 'immature'
but who the f**k wants to mature
why make it derrogatory?
b******s

"but time was traveling
freezing in their faces and the baby
who knew, was just pissing all around
causing a scene to be seen or maybe
she just had to pee and didn't know
how to not do it yet" - great section

cynical tone
skipping between
the stoned teen
and the child
who was
or wasn't
or maybe still is

fast-paced flow
this really works for me
i want to say f**k the essays
and do me a series of these
please

but that's 'immature'