Nerlx

Slip
     Deep     
     Inside     

NowBreathe.

See..?
You.are.me

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

And I think back to three months
ago when I could barely fit a finger
into the hole of plenty we’ve
weaved into complete obliteration of
satisfactory deprivation

that deprived mind
of yours that wasn’t
that of mine at all until
the day you came

barefoot across the bed
body closing in
shifting through the mucky mire
of insecurities to the point it was
nearly impossible to breathe

in and out the aroma
of p***y needing the knead
to experience
what some would call dirty deeds

on top of
your husband’s sheets
that do not matter to me
except for your night time
security

in the end all i really want
is for you to remember me
my love and what we share
the secrets transposed
against the transcript of our
idiosyncrasies

swimming in between
our tasty heap
deep and ardent penetrating
beneath those sheets
inside of the you and i that has
become we

the listless Sheppard’s sheep

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

nerlx is a word to describe that feeling you get when you want something that is out of reach out of habit and out of mind

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Ahhh! The bliss of being one. This is such a rare glimpse into something that most people never even experience, the transcendental elevation beyond oneself.

I have felt this, and it's something never to be forgotten. It really changes you forever.

Great job! Thank you for sharing and keep shining.

[Raef C. Boylan]

Welling up again.

What the f**k?

I think it's the sincerity of the love
in this piece

the togetherness
achievement
of easing each other through
as you ease into

...the [w]hole is
none of my business

there's doubt
about
the situation
being long term

there's pride
for having overcome
in a way that felt
natural

there's change
in attitude and feelings
concerning acts
that some others
take for granted

there's great language and
choice of expressions
[choice implies choice
whispered the voice

presume no.thing]

you've managed not to
gloss over things blithely
which i admire a lot
even a stanza
that some would see as jokey
is actually perfection
in poetry:

"in and out the aroma
of p***y needing the knead
to experience
what some would call dirty deeds"

and says so much
without deviating
from blunt style


this is really amazing

[i think]
one of your best

...for now.

Seriously, I like this a lot and think it's great.
Thanks for writing and posting it.


p.s.
Which Sheppard?

"your husbands sheets" (husband's)

[Raef C. Boylan]

Heyyyy...
i been lifting rocks
for days
to see where you've
been hiding

It was originally just the first six lines, right?
Niiice expanding.

Hmmm.
Has suddenly made me cry.
Wish i was kidding.

I'll be back.

Sniff. Yo.

[Raef C. Boylan]

Person becomes an appendage
when connected
like hand to arm
vagina to dick hard
hand disappears
like glove puppets
glove puppets allow strange people
to project their alter-egos
on kids TV
therefore you're wearing her
she's wearing you
same person
seamless

apparently this is something called flash poetry
haha i am not all-knowing
about s**t

it's good
but yeah
expand! expand!
obey! obey!

I like the technique
of melting words
and breaking lines up
inhale
"NowBreathe."
ragged exhale
"You.are.me"
or something

wait
they are linked
breathing is evidence of the one-ness
up and down together?
both exhale at same time?

hmm.

anyway, 'tis good

even without description
don't think i'd have thought 'babies'

a dirty mind is a terrible thing to waste

i once had a badge with that on
bet i thought i was hot s**t
plain black backpack for school
decorated in mundane wit

yo.

[E. Maggard]

Quickie flash poetry.

I think I'm okay with that too.

I like the quick glimpse into an intimate moment. It was done very quickly (it seems quick is the word of the day) and it is very effective...

Great job

[lostintheworld]

alright i give this a whirl
first off i see this as a flash poem of sorts
and i love flash, but i think it's such an interesting experience to take a flash poem
and expand it
and I'll ask you to do that and you'll comply
someday
cuase I'm gonna have your baby
so
yeah...back to the poem though...

this could be about baby blue ...hmmm
just saying...
triple double A's
okay damnit i gotta focus

alright so well
Slip--i think wet, i think ball turret gunner, I can go with birth...
Deep inside- i think of you entering someone, or being entered...so possibly being inhabited by a child //a fetus...
Now breathe, I see this as breathe through the birth, but also breathing when something enters you deep inside...

See? you are me- now i see you refelcting on the birth of the baby and recognizing your image in it's image