USofL: iSpilt MyShelf

iEye was a travel.linger
Traveller searching for the four
Sigh.iEye.did fur of for.got.ten
Faults flipping off two
Feign.girl.less hands

The Route was SixTeen,
And the blackc.l.ock read 0000 when
My two water.legs had put me
On that route to Sir.BiBiLL
A survival town of sorts
Where iEye'd bee zee
Ring lead.her of the
Hibiscus Flower
Pouring my Lost pride
For keeping the key in the
Fame.ill.E
Because my initials are L E
And Malaysia
Ain't got nothin' on me
But the South China Sea,
umm cause
iM not divided into two parts
iTs more like three..
Two, the power of me

turn it down turn it down turn it down
the music
the music

r u n n i n g

up my arm
all fast passed but
spaced out
the words in the soup
kitchen full
of old meat
old beat meat
old meat beat
to a pulp
the pulp in my juice
pulping pumping
pulsing through
my blood
the indigo indian
flavored lust
latching onto my tongue
as i

Y..A..W..N

R.U.B

SNiFF

Scratch
the scab pulling off beneath
my fingers
Damn my luck
the f****r's bleeding

The TunnelSign said USofL
Twentea9iNe feet
But the Wagon in front of me said
The best of theUSofL right here
ZeRoW feet
My feet inched right along side as
My iEyes stretched to get
a look inside

Git..'er..done

What the f**k..?

Ka blamm E

A Welcome Wagon
Tagged USofL
exploded right beside me
and my hands were
still attached to the
chemicals that made it happen

Ah the innocence shattered as
iEye was just walking through
the door....
Where the sum of all the numbers is
Seventy four
Minus 4OUR

 

 

Reviews

[Myshel]

this is interesting... i like the double meaning in your imaginative spelling (alot) ..Fin.girl.less hands and keeping the key in the
Fame.ill.E (ill) sick... brilliantly written
My feet inched right along side
My iEyes stretched to get
a look inside ... love this phrase
intriguing... very

[G. Harrison Quay]

I don't really understand your poetry, but I like your prose. I'm really sorry you are so angry.

[W Alt. Burns]

playin with words down to the t.
yur gud my dear

real gud!

[...Where Nothing Is Sac..]

I agree with everything C.Boylan says.

Lol.

Took me a while to get that "USofL" = United States of Lauren (I think?)
You see United States of Leland?
'tis a good movie
i mean film
d****t i'm british
must suppress
the urge to oppress
other countries
oops we don't do that
[haha]
what i meant was
...f**k it

C.Boylan
didn't pick up on it
yo
mo'f***a

Yeah, this is a really good read, there's shitloads happening and you don't leave us too far behind; the playing with words is good.

"Sigh.iEye.did fur of for.got.ten"

sigh. i did [fur - don't get this bit...unless it's 'differ' with the "did"?) often for got ten forgotten

Like your way with words jumble 'em fry or scramble n spread 'em on toast.
chomp!

[Raef C. Boylan]

There's a lot going on here.
No way that i'm gonna dig the underlying
the big picture
[pig bitchher haha see what ya done to me]
but i'll have a looksie
at what i see we shall see
if i dissect confidently
and get it wrong
maybe they'll have that sense of satisfaction
they've been shovelling mud down my throat for
so long and it's not mud it's
fertiliser
manure
bullshit
maybe horseshit
whatever 'cos it
all festers the same

"Feign.girl.less hands" - fingerless - feign girl less - like your femininity is at stake maybe or maybe just remarking on the dropping of pretences?

"And the blackc.l.ock read 0000 when
My two water.legs had put me
On that route to Sir.BiBiLL" - don't get why the misspelling of "black clock"; think i've totally missed the significance, unless it's just to draw(l) it out...in which case, yeah cool.
I like "My two water.legs" for some reason. Wobbly like Bambi on ice on a stick waving precariously in the juicy hands of a carefree child heh heh.
Bible? Sir Bible? Is it a real town or some preacherman figure?
So early and I'm lost.
Throw me a map or just knock me out and drag me cos i don't deserve to be seeing this if i can't spare the energy to at least try.
"Where iEye'd bee zee
Ring lead.her of the
Hibiscus Flower" - i like the playfulness of this, but then there's self-accusation:
"For keeping the key in the
Fame.ill.E" - some sickage thoughts going on. L.E, we're sorry.
"And Malaysia
Ain't got nothin' on me
But the South China Sea,
umm cause
iM not divided into two parts" - provoke some thought and share yourself. Like it.

"the words in the soup
kitchen full
of old meat
old beat meat
old meat beat
to a pulp" - your word play's got quite a beat going on here.

"Scratch
the scab pulling off beneath
my fingers
Damn my luck
the f****r's bleeding" - always a bit of dialalogue-esque humour, the s**t we live for, and it's always comedy-but-serious stuff.

"Git..'er..done

What the f**k..?

Ka blamm E" - ka blam what we got here it's BLAME; disjointed stream of consciousness stuff like we're left in the dark with just the whites of our eyes showing like marge and homer in bed switching off the lamp and there's just eyeballs blinking...roll credits.

"A Welcome Wagon
Tagged USofL
exploded right beside me
and my hands were
still attached to the
chemicals that made it happen" - brilliant stanza; bewildered or triumphant who can tell and we don't need to know we just need to know. Yo.

Seventy? Triggers not much for me.
Well, i can't know it all i guess.

F*****g great.
If you ever 'fix' it, definitely let me come around again on my merry-go-round horse where the eyes are anything but merry and the teeth bared racing chasing a vicious giraffe is this insanity shush never mind let's go round again.

Thanks for sharing this.
I really really like it.

[lostintheworld]

so that's what it's like.
I had always wondered.
You are the ringleader... hmmm hibiscus- this will take me some time to ponder.

the taste...yes, I've seen you tasting it before...
turn it down turn it down...i love this part.

i'm gonna think on this longer.
but i love it.

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