Bare & Beautiful

I thought about her again last night.

Her hazel eyes,

The smell of her hair, 

The smell of her,

The feel of her waist, 

Her breasts, her p***y;

Pressed beautifully, bare, against me.

Part of myself missed the reality of the memory.

But even I know; when a ship sinks, it’s really gone. 

Reviews

[Epipsychologist]

I particularly like the last line. The direct, explicit mention of her tender bits makes us feel like she's right there, but the simile at the end forces us into abstraction, so we relate to the feeling of being immediately drawn from memory to the reminder that it is only memory.

[tyson]

you make it sound much more premeditated than it was, thank you!

[poetdoug]

You have a wonderful talent for word painting.
"The feel of her waist,her breasts, her p***y"
Pressed beautifully, bare against me.
Really well done my friend

[tyson]

stop it! you've made me blush. but in all seriousness, I really appreciate that. Thank you!

[Sarah Lynn]

Short yet filled with so much emotion! I really liked the last line to "But even I know; when a ship sinks, it’s really gone. " So true, i feel like that has just become my new favorite quote ! lol

[tyson]

super glad you took something from it, makes it all worth while. I'm just on some of your works now, really impressed!

[Sarah Lynn]

Well you're welcome(: and thank you!