Perfect

Please read the poem, read my note, then read the poem again.

Perfection is in its self a flaw

All liars  whom claimed they saw.

As everyone is searching for this myth

All fall into the disappointment pit.

Perfection is not a state of mind

Like some misread road sign.

The real words which one has to read

Are non existent in this world we plead.

But then why live in a flawed place?

Why live in such a disgusting disgrace?

For if perfection is another false heaven

Imperfection is a very real Armageddon.

But if imperfection is indeed a final fight,

Who gets to say who's wrong and who's right?

Who are exactly the legendary two great sides?

Or are they simply stories thrown with giant tides?

And what of me? One little tiny voice.

What can I do to make myself rejoice?

For if the walls of reality are tore down.

Would I smile, or would I frown?

Author's Note

Now, bear with me here, as this poem gets slightly complicated.

This poem speaks about perfection.

The first stanza is very simple. The first stanza claims that perfection is not real, anyone whom says it is real and they saw it are liers, and anyone who is looking for it will be disappointed.

The second stanza, states that perfection is not a state of mind. Some people believe that something is perfect only if you see it as so. The second stanza disagrees with the first line. as it isn't something that can be like a misread sign. Then it continues to state that the real words of perfection, that you have to read to achieve perfection, in reality do not exist in our world.

The third stanza then asks why live in a world without perfection? Another theory of perfection is then presented, that perfection is only available in heaven. But if this is thrown out the window as a "false heaven" This is when imperfection is introduced, as if perfection truly doesn't exist, why do we know about it? So it must exist in some form or another. Then the stanza states that imperfection is indeed an ongoing fight to achieve perfection, like a biblical Armageddon

The fourth stanza, continues with the final fight theory, and asks simply. Who is fighting? What makes perfection really? What are the factors? The rules that create perfection? The two sides (good and evil) represent the unknown rules of perfection These questions remain unanswered. The final line of this stanza then states that the maybe the rules themselves are also a myth. "stories thrown with giant tides"

And finally, the final stanza. The final stanza states what what can the poet do to help in the fight and make himself rejoice(with perfection), but then he asks, if the walls of reality are tore down, if perfection wins, would he accept perfection as a better state, or would he miss his old state, his old world?

Sorry for frying your brain.

Reviews

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

you've poured a lot of thought and self searching into this poem~ presentation is flawless and engages the audience instantly into a questing mode~ you've created an excellent inner exploration within the composition~

[Caitlynxoxo]

don't worry; my brain remains unfried ;) I really, really enjoyed your poem. You obviously cared for the subject and it shows. You illustrated perfectly what our perceptions of perfect are, be they wrong or right. Good job :)

[Ry]

This is one of those topics that people like me tend to worry and think about day after day, and year after year trying to find the answer. It's an unanswerable question. Personally, I think that unanswerable questions are the best questions in the world, because they make even the smartest creatures scratch their heads. They force acception or insanity. One has not lived until their brain has been sufficiently fried. =) Another great one.

[master squiggles]

This is very, very good... I loved it. I agree with everyone - you did do a great job of describing what perfection truly is. The rhyming was very nice, and it was heartwarming to read. The words in this poem are true. ;)

[Adelia Alighieri]

I think you did a great job with the idea of describing what exactly perfection is for you, which is very different point of view.
The rhyme was splendid, something that picked up the pace of the poem.
I'll add in in my favorites for sure.

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. first off ... i must compliment you on the way you explore the various realms of perfection as you see them ... the compactness of this write reeks of poetic and philosophical excellence ... personally ... i tend to simplify things a little ... perhaps to the level of complexity that i am able to negotiate ... i think that our lives are made of moments ... some of them common to many of us ... but when we put them in words and they're able to capture the moment such that the reader can experience the moment ... then the reader is likely to respond with 'oh that's a perfect choice of words' ... at the same time ... another person may have experienced an identical or similar moment ... and we might read about it and our response might be the same or similar ... maybe what i'm trying so hard to say is that there are many perfects ... many perfect moments ... and many poets who pursue excellence and perfection relentlessly ... and then the absolute test is whether or not we recreated a moment or thought with words that are memorable ... i often equate poetry with songs ... they have music in common ... and sometimes i hear verses like songs ... there are so many different songs that are memorable ... hundreds ... and yet we remember them ... the world is becoming more and more imperfect because we're not listening to our songs often enough and celebrating perfection ... in whichever hue we might find it ... phew! ... now i'm sorry for frying your brain ... :D ...

[Hellslastwarrior]

goood poem mate i couldn't agree mroe - many seek perfection but there is no such thing as we can only seek to better ourself but we can never reach the point where something can not be bettered - it is human nature and thats just the way we are.
Very good got alot of insight and truthful meaning- keep it up enjoyed the poem and think you put alot of thought and effort into this piece of work.
oh btw just take a little look at Legenery - it is spelt legendary matey. Not trying to be picky just thought would make you aware of it.
Ted - giving a nice score of 100.