The perfect couple

a description of the oh so real perfect couple.

Together, we walk side by side,

Being each other's life guide.

In this rocky road we call life,

Together, like two identical mice.

We are bonded together, unbreakable.

Standing the test of time,unshakable.

Merged together by the natural mother,

destruction of one leads to the other.

We often anger each other,

We often blame one another,

Yet we will always stay together,

always each other's hidden treasure.

When dark times come, we are gloom,

For there is no I,should you assume.

We try out best to keep the laughter,

sometimes it stays, or dies in disaster.

Together,We avoid the deadly mines.

Together,We enjoy various wines.

Together, We write these very lines.

Together,We meet our demise.

Author's Note

This is NOT a love poem(to another person, at least). It's written to seem like one, but it's actually a poem about learning to love's one self(still technically a love poem hehe :P). the second person the poem talks about is him/herself Inspired by "The company of myself" (google it)

Reviews

[RDOriginal]

This is a really refreshing way of writing a romantic poem. There are so many books and therapies that demand we should learn to 'love ourselves' but this is the first poem I've come across that explores the idea.

Reading this poem I see the two partners in this 'couple' as being the heart (emotions) and the brain (logic). Both do "walk side by side" but so many times in life we find ourselves forced to choose between one or the other that we can really agree with the phrase, "we often anger each other". However, they are still inextricably linked. Nobody can live with just one or the other, no matter how hard they try as "destruction of one leads to the other".

Technically the choice of the AABB rhyme scheme encourages the reader to move fairly quickly through this poem. Taking that approach works well here as for me it emphasises just how many aspects there are to this 'relationship'. It also leads to a good crescendo at the end with the repetition of the word 'together' to finally drive the point home once and for all.

This poem is engaging and well thought. It's novel content is also something to ponder on. Very impressive!

[FeliciaS (Poetic Prince..]

I agree with Coyote Poetry. Beautiful

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is beautiful. Your logic is correct. With the good. Some bad may happen. Strong heart hold on tight and hope the storms will pass. I like the complete poem. A lot of good wisdom in your words. A outstanding poem.
Coyote