Fire

Same concept as the rose, diff metaphor.

The fire burns in the night,

As it glows, ever so bright.

Around the fire is smoke,

Making it's victims choke.

The fire dances with fame,

The smoke hides, not as tame.

Under the cover of the night,

it lies unseen hidden from sight.

The fire is now calming it's flames.

weakening & dimming, while it tames.

Smoke emerges from the shadows

Blackening the green meadows. 

The fire has left us.

Only smoke remains,

Gathering the dust.

Clensing the plains.

Author's Note

Personally I feel that the rose metaphor works better, as fire does consume as well(something I failed to point out in the story) critique requested!

Reviews

[[KL]]

This is good, I have to say.. But I'm not too sure about the imagery of the shark? In my opinion (and it may just be mine)... The shark doesnt fit in too well with the theme of this piece, if you see what I mean? Of course, it's hard to find a living creature that lives IN fire - unless you're talking about pokemon - but I'm sure you don't want to make this seem light-hearted.
Smoke striking like snakes? I think that's also something that doesn't work too well.. Unless by that you mean suffocating "They"? And not trying to relate the actual motion of a snake honing in on its prey..
Either way, this is a good write.. Thanks for sharing. (:
[M]