The Window

Poem about finding another way.

The door is locked,I cannot enter.

I slam my fist, cursing the inventor

What shall I do if there is no key?
If only there was more simplicity!

The door sealed shut, and I cry.

Is this where I intend to die?
NO! I will not rot in his hole!
I WILL reach my goal!

I Summon up my strength and slam through!

However, the door does not move and stays true.

My heart is on fire, and I try again and again!

It's useless, I'm stuck here, forget the pretend.

I promised, I will not rot here.

So, my only choice is clear.

I hesitate, then take the knife

Ready, to take my own life.

As I am about to strike my heart,

I drop the knife, then fall apart.

I cannot do this, I am weak!

It doesn't matter how I speak.

I sit on the floor and shed tears,

that is when the voice appears.

"There is another way" it spoke.

Then it was gone in a stroke.

I look around the room, hope in my eyes.

After a while, I finally spot the prize.

A plain old window, showing a tree.

In a matter of seconds, I am free. 

Author's Note

Please remember that the whole story is one metaphor of our situations.

Reviews

[Devons]

I thought for a while this was going to be a funny poem.. then it turned violent, and i realised it was going to be more interesting... I like the idea of 'looking for another way' - i kind of took it as half-metaphor, half-real, as the suicide part seemed more like a genuine situation.. Yes, the metaphor works well -though maybe a little blunt in simplicity- and the concept of a life being locked in with no way out, then somehow finding that something has been overlooked.. All one needs is the good fortune to be able to see it.. or perhaps actually try to see it..

The technical side of this poem is perfect. Flawless rhyme scheme, scan, and form. Very good piece of work. Again.

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is powerful. The story brought me in and held my attention. I like the ending. We must find the prize. Listen to the hope in our mind and heart. A very good ending to a poem of struggle and discovery. A excellent poem.
Coyote