The little red riding hood

Poem about fairy tales in general

Once upon a time, in a land far away,
A little girl wearing a red hood
went outside to play.

Her mother had called her for a favor
“Grandma is sick!” Said her mum
So she hands her a basket full of treats
“Give it to your grandma, and don’t run!”

Off the little girl goes, off to give the treats
Grandma lives far away, the girl thinks
So I’ll take  a shortcut through the woods
Do you think she really should?

Deep in the Forest lies a big bad wolf,
With large teeth, ears and nose,
The wolf sees the girl and follows

The wolf does not hide behind the trees,
He does not dress up as grandma and then flees
He jumps from the woods, teeth razor-sharp
Surprising the girl, faster then a dart.

The wolf does not speak, animals don’t talk.
He attacks the girl with all his might,
Ripping her, while no one is in sight!

The little girl shrieks from fear
yet not enough time to shed a tear

The wolf gnaws at her corpse

He is not tame like the horse.
Feeding himself as a wolf should,
he feasts on the girl in the hood.

The mother never hears from the girl again,
And laughs with all her heart, what a strange act
The mother is happy, and will not pretend
She is glad to get rid of that brat.

And so the story ends here, of the little girl
who lived happily ever after,
Is that what I should tell?

Author's Note

I think this one's a keeper!

Reviews

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... oh no ... i'm sorry to be the one to say it ... but i must ... this is very disappointing ... the tense and rhyming skidded and slipped ... particularly in the second and third stanzas ... "basket full of treats" for the sick? ... doesn't work for me ... "and then flees" ... in the sentence where it is ... is so incorrect ... "The mother is happy, and will not pretend" ... is not at all a realist image ... it just doesn't work ... even in this narrative ... the last stanza is not rendered skillfully either ... "is that what i should tell?" doesn't sound too correct ... i expect error-free, skillful writing from you, ryan ... i think the idea is excellent ... but the execution is not ... if you can, please try re-writing this ... (am not rating this) ...

[Jessica Mai]

haha this made me laugh. Although a few aspects of this poem are not perfect, this is still great! I really enjoyed it and awesome idea!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the modern version of a old story. You wrote it with skill and the story was very good. Old world had changed. Bad Wolf had a lot of more competition now. A outstanding story. Thank you.
Coyote

[ShayRad21]

Ohohoho! I love this one! It is a macabre look at something everyone thinks is a cute story that ends with the huntsman saving little reds and grandma's life! I love twists in the story.

The only think I would look for is the watch the flow.
there were a couple of times when I stumbled
because it was to short or to long. It doesn't mess up
the poem by any means but it's a bit distracting. XD

Keep up the good work!

[R. Nella]

My children will be read this version.

[SR Urie]

Bad Ryan,
Point my finger at you and slap you on the wrist! Great prose though! BZ

[lamia]

this is great to read , I read the original story and I think this one is better as it shows the reality even when it's cruel , that's what all writings should be about , unmasking the truth not to " live happily ever after" , so good job!

[Devons]

Very very funny! I once read the 'politically correct' version of Little Red Riding Hood and that was boring really (says it all) - but this is a bit more than 'politically INcorrect'; it's like the Harsh Reality version. It jumps out on you and strikes a deadly blow, just as everything seemed to be so sweet and wonderful..