Permanent Damage

i thought of this one day.was sooo depressed cuz I treated a really cool guy like s**t.:(

I was falling.Falling down a long black hole.The only light came from floating lanterns.Then I saw your face.It was angry.I called out to you but I got no response.You said you never wanted to see my face again.My heart dropped like a rock in water.I instantly wantes to die.You were serious weren't you?You truly hated me now.And I wanted to die.The cuts on my wrist are nothing.The pain is like a prick on the finger compared to the pain in my heart now.Why?I can't stand this!It hurts A LOT!! What am I going to do now?WHAT AM I GOING TO DO NOW?!?

Reviews

[Disillusioned]

Great emotions put forth here. Writing is very healing, and as a mind creates a boulder around a grain of salt, the heart finds the sting of said salt fading.

[Terra]

ok Wild Child idc wat u think rite now so....

[Thea Fuentebella]

no no don't cut yourself that's mere stupidity! this story's depressing. and you really portrayed the emotions of a girl with everything important destroyed around her well. you make me sad :( ...if that's what you're trying to express then a helluva good job for you! :)

[Searching 4 Serenity]

If pain TRULY is your solution for escaping heartache, remember it is never a good one. It's only temporary for numbing the emotional pain. What do you do now? Move onward, move forward. Look to what your present and future holds. Dwindling on the past only prolongs suffering and 'almost' always stops you in your tracks. The only "Permanent Damage" that exists is what you are not willing to forgive and forget.

[Linear]

Why whats your gramms got to do with it lol

Hope this is just a story, I hate to hear of young one's cutting themselves, but a good start to a story :O)

[Deactivated_BurningDemo..]

Amazing. I can feel the pain here. I'd recommend spaces between the sentences to make it easier to read, but it also makes it a faster read as though the sentences blurred into one another. Also I noticed wantes should be wanted. Apart from that I loved it, and I hope you don't feel like this. :/

[Terra]

thanks for all comments.

[typingaway]

Wow, well done!

[Terra]

Excuse my grammar.