A verse for an apple tree

A little work to show how much the little things mean in life.

Outsiders come in.

Insiders come out. 

Three languages,

One spoken by 20

Two spoken by 100

      Apples.

Bring the out out of outsiders

Bring the in into insiders

    and pull together

Two communities

Put the friend into

a sinking ship

To create a floating friend-ship

Author's Note

Honest reviews please :) x

Reviews

[NightWatch]

I really like the rhythm that you introduce in the first two lines. I also appreciate the interjection of "Apples" in line 5, adding a hiccup to the flow of the piece. Kind of like in a symphony where the music builds to a tension and then stops suddenly, giving you a moment to think about what just happened. The grand idea of bringing two peoples together is marvelous, and I love it.
Hopefully this helps, as I have not improved my skills in poetry in the last year haha

[TwoDaysTooLate]

Haha thank you so much ^-^ I love your music comparison xD you certainly have improved in analysis though :)

[NightWatch]

Glad I could be of assistance! And thank you! :)