Together Again

You leave me like the sun leaves earth to darkness

Then you return to me like a beautiful sunrise

Thus bringing new life and hope

Though the moon is beautiful, it cant compare

it cant compare at all to your wonderful rays of light

The light calls me, begs me come closer

I, but a simple rose, reaching out to your grace

A gloomy gray cloud, being the distance between us

It prevents me from being with you

Have no fears

For clear skies will come soon

Together again soon

Reviews

[Dark Angel Reborn]

This peace is beautiful. I love your use of imagery and emotion. It flows very nicely and keeps the reader interested. My only criticism would be the use of punctuation. Some of it is just so out of place. It throws the reader and can cause distraction.

[Butterflymom]

This is a beautiful piece. Thank you for sharing it!

[JC]

I like the meter of this piece, as well as the subject matter.

The opening line draws you in, hoping that the rest of the piece does not dissappoint, which it doesn't. A clean up of the punctuation would do nicely.

Wonderful read, kudos.

JC

[she who must not be nam..]

Can you put apostrophes?? I can read it fine, but it kind of annoys me.