Let Me Take A Moment

Let me take a moment to say
He’s mine
His smile; one that makes my heart flutter and swoon
His laugh; the only one that echoes through my mind in bliss
His eyes; a pair that I can get lost in for hours

Let me take a moment to say
I love him
With all his flaws and quirks
With all his insecurities and doubts
He is all I can see when my nights go red

Let me take a moment to say
He is my love
His happiness is my priority and his embrace is my motivation
Every sacrifice I make is within his honor
I wouldn't have it any other way

Let me take a moment to say
I do
As he and I stand before a church
Our eyes running with praise and our cheeks burning with smiles
Because we made it
And all that rests on my finger is a diamond ring
And all that fills my heart is my love for him

© 2017 quєєn tєα™

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Glen Weimann

Hi there. I was surfing and came upon this.

If you read my poem 'I don't like being in love' you'll see where I stand on 'love', but this poem puts that somewhat to one side. It's a poem that talks about enduring things, of having been through trials and emerged together stronger. It says neither of us is perfect, but who we are is enough. Can't argue with any of that! It's clearly 'your' point of view and says almost nothing about his feelings for you other than by inference and the one 'we' reference - as such, it reads a little like the declarations many couples make to each other in wedding ceremonies (though presumably you'd change it from 'he' to 'you' if that were the case).

I think you've written this very well. I really like the repeated opening to each verse and the consistent but not hidebound structure thereafter. Sad to say, but I like the absence of spelling mistakes or inappropriate punctuation, and the implication I draw that this has been proof-read by someone who cares.

If this is a work of observation of others, I applaud its authenticity and skill. If it's you saying these words, may I in addition wish you both joy for the coming years!

Regards
Nigel