Thanks for No Help

Yeah..so..um..I don't know what to say about this. Umm..it's supposed to be a poem but..lol. My writing isn't that great.

I've called your name

and was ignored.

I've tried to talk to you

but you seemed very bored.

I've run out of excuses

to have you here with me.

I don't think we belong together anymore,

can't you understand and see?

I've tried to make you happy,

but you didn't seem pleased.

I've tried to bring you back to where we were,

But you were not appeased.

So I'm done with what I can not fix,

I'm done with this mess.

I'm done with trying to make everything right,

You've done nothing but cause me distress!

 

 

Reviews

[JohnL]

Actually, there's nothing wrong with your writing - see your intro. The poem hasn't been written that doesn't ask for a change just after we've done the final edit. Looking at this work the rhyme scheme is uneven. In this work, that is to your credit. It prevents it becoming trite - sort of introduces a little hiccup now and then. Keeps the attention focussed. It doesn't harp on for ever, it is not whinging and whining but making a statement and the grammar and punctuation demonstrate care and thoughtfulness!
Happy New Year!
John