You

Your words

So soft and sweet

Every one seeming

to make my heart skip a beat.

Your touch

Comforting and warm

Why does it sometimes feel like

An electrical storm?

Your voice

So calm and alluring

And also very assuring.

Your love

Unexplainable and pure,

For me it is the only cure.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Michael]

I like the overall feel of the poem. It has a great message. I am wondering about the construction of it thought. In looking at it broken down into stanzas, based on rhyme, you have two quatrains with an aBcB rhyme, followed by two tercets with a rhymed couplet to end them. While it works well and really does not need to change, you could give it a bit more balance by adding a line to the tercets to match the quatrains. Please don't thin me harsh, it is a very small point and the poem is lovely as it, just something for you to think about.

[Chaos]

This is so sweetly written. I love how you own the feeling in this piece. I enjoyed the write very much. Thank you for sharing and also for such a nice comment on my other piece.

Chaos~

[ganymeder]

I love the layout and melody of the poem. It's lovely. Please don't change a thing. :)

[HPsGurl1]

NO! Don't change it! I love it the way it is!!! I feel as if I can feel what is going on when I read it. Amazing!

[Ms Jessica Renee]

A powerful poem in its own right. Keep it up darlin'.

[Windy]

You have a real knack (sp?) for writing with feeling and keeping up a good flow and rhyme at the same time. I like how you write "heartfelt" and though it was short it made it's point. Great job. ;)

[lauren emily]

Thanks,
I know this isn't my strongest poem..I wrote it at 3 in the morning. haha.
I'm not too happy about the ending of it..I'd like to change it..
Thanks for the tips,
Lauren