Dark Places

An example of "dark poetry", which also has a moral message...

In dark places,

shadows chase us,

seeking out our every move,

 

But in days long past,

if life was to last,

one fought the evil ghast,

 

In these days of sin,

we seek to win,

every desire and every whim,

 

Not thinking ahead,

of a future we dread,

our thoughts but a muddled thread,

 

Face not fear the future,

embrace divinity's tutor,

you'll become a worthy suitor,

 

And it's darkness,

which shall shun you instead...

Author's Note

If you are interested in dark poetry, then feel free to join the Dark Poetry Writing Group, on this site!

Reviews

[Fia Naturie]

That one stanza "Not thinking ahead, of a future we dread, our thoughts but a muddled thread" makes one really admit that sometimes we can not think about the future to far ahead. It can be overwhelming. Nice piece.

[Lucy Joan]

Indeed, this is a thoughtfully written, dark poem. And I love the structure of the poem; the rhyming just flowed with it and the last two lines were just bellowing wonders. Amazing.

[Michelle Lea]

Wow, nice piece! So well put together... the flow of the poem and the rhyme. I like the wording that you used. More plz! Keep up the great works. (-:

[Dana Kathryn]

I must say this is very good starts out melancholy then ends on a positive note,that feels like a deep breath of freash air,I like your stuff!!! Come by and check out some of mine when you have a moment...DKB-

[Sheila Marie Carr]

I love the poem and I love dark poetry, I do believe I have quiet a few of my own, you did a great job on it.

I liked they way the darkness fell from your words, even though I had to read this six times because of my teacher walking behind me every five seconds...

Good job my friend!

[black_rose_obsession]

oohh I like it. It's dark but in a beautiful way. great write!

[Andrew'sWonderland]

"Face not fear the future,

embrace divinity's tutor,

you'll become a worthy suitor," My Favorite Lines!!

This is truly an exceptional write filled with a message that sends hope to the darkest places!!! I loved the flow, rhyme, and details provided!

[Kathryn Star, Shine!]

Interesting, I've never really read dark poetry... I liked the view of one in sin... trying to take it away, but never able to run... always there... I liked it. Not an expert on dark poetry. lol ks

[cquig]

My mood changed after this read, and I mean that in a good way. I liked it so much I read it again but out loud this time. Oooooo, now I like it even more. This may sound strange, but it felt good in my mouth.