Raven of True Virtue

Tell me it's true,

my raven of virtue,

as sure as your feathers are dark,

it's true that I have missed you.

 

From your lofty perch,

you gaze upon my world,

bemused by all that happens,

whilst the tragedy unfolds.

 

Where will it end?

I imagine that you wonder,

as each passing day,

another business "goes under".

 

How long must I wait,

to see some strength return,

to my poor cynical mind,

or should I live in hope no more?

 

Complacency in politics,

no more "big ideas",

and with each passing moment,

catastrophe seems near.....

Reviews

[Ligeia]

Great poem, but for some reason I don't feel as though it's concluded.
You ended it a bit abruptly, but perhaps that was your goal.

Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed this.
I love the symbol of the raven, it reminds me of Poe and although you used it in this poem you made it entirely your own.
I find that quite admirable, keep up the good work.

Thank you very much for sharing this.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

this poem had a very interesting twist. at first, the raven seems like a benevolent figure that proffesses spiritual advice. however, it turns into an impotent one. the world is in some sort of decline and nobody seems to know what to do about it. this reminds me of an Adam Curtis documentary. we live in a world where pesssimism is the most appropiate hat to wear.

[Pryde Foltz]

I suppose ravens do represent wisdom and inspiration. I felt the listlessness to this right but I think too , despite poetic protestation to the contrary that hope too was on the wing but perhaps still hidden below the horizon. Superb write:)

[Twilight]

Thanks. Yes, even when writing this; I was conscious that it was thematically digressing in places. Keep writing yourself, and sending "read requests"...!

[Marie Harrison]

Clever poem. I like it.

[Livana Lowell]

Like the symbolism of the Raven portraying it as that one third eye that observes all or the world bring forth truth that people often reject.

I like abrupt ending. It leaves the reader quite dazzled or it might've been me.

Anyways, I like that you went into the point of view of the Raven creating an airy mood. I really enjoyed this.

[K. Carver]

Ah. I love it.
Very nice.
Gives the sense that the worst is upon you.
Well done.

[Vertigo]

hmm beautifully written

[JC]

Nicely done Julian...

I have to agree and disagree on some of the previous posts. I agree that this seems unfinished some how, like there is more to say.

I disagree on the comparison of Poe's raven to yours. Poe's Raven was used as a metaphor for questions we already know the answer too. In your raven, we are seeking an answer.

Nice meter as well.


JC

[Sean M. Addams]

very nice piece like the imagery and detail in this... overall very nicely done...

[Stacey Watts]

Nicely written piece. Very true to what our world is going through at the moment. Excellent piece