Him and Her

A poem of love, and the punishment of silence for those who have chosen not to accept the will of what is natural and pure.

Their lives were long,
and bitter sweet,
the parents claimed,
that they would never meet

But love is a gamble,
come what may,
both of whom,
knew what to do,
because their passion was true

Spite their elders,
come what may,
never looking back,
from that special day

When Ariadne left her thread,
leading the couple,
to be newly wed,
twas at their parents' dread

But their families did not know,
how far they would go,
to defend the love held so dear,
the loss of which they did fear

As the years past,
their love was no farce,
when they kissed so tenderly each day,
surely such bliss could not go away?

Throughout every night,
cupid saw them right,
with a passion so warm,
their lust always raw

But at dawn one day,
a stranger did say,
that their families could take no more,
disloyalty could never be borne

So the two lovers left,
their families bereft,
of the children they used to adore,
would speak to them no more

Despite all those years,
they never shed tears,
for love is much stronger than scorn,
without it our lives are forlorn.

Author's Note

The families of those young lovers are no longer spoken to, by the ones who had been most dear to them. A fitting punishment for those who have sought to stifle true love, perhaps?

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

My initial response to this poem was not positive. The change in rhyme scheme from one stanza to the next disrupted the fluidity of the poem and made it difficult to read. However, upon reading it a second time, this didn't seem to relevant to me. I think the poem could be caressed a bit more to give it the warmth of the love described. I really liked the inclusion of Ariadne and her magic thread.

[Ladysue]

wow, I think was very strongly expressed. It flowed well and the message was spoke volumes. Great job!

[J.Black]

Hmm very interesting Julian. Nice rhyme scheme you have here.
"But their families did not know,
how far they would go,
to defend the love held so dear,
the loss of which they did fear" -- Ah I wonder if this is a true story to be honest? Perhaps it is? Usually you would have to be inspired to write something like this and as good as you did. I have gone through a similar experience, well not to wed, for I am still quite young, but for asking approval of a certain someone. IF they did not approve it would not be broken because it was a lost that just kept getting stronger. Perhaps people like parents don't know this sort of thing? Especially since if they cannot relate. Usually the ugly ducking never finds his true love. In this case, it seems like he did.
"Despite all those years,
they never shed tears,
for love is much stronger than scorn,
without it our lives are forlorn."

[Rain]

Nice rhyme scheme. True story? Wow, kind of sounds like my wife and I. I was a bum, and she was a 10 year younger naive girl who could have married anyone she chose. But, unlike your poem, her mother finally accepted me. Rain..

[269]

I know the sadness when parents don't approve of your mate. thumbs up.

[ATG]

This was a great poem. It rhymed with ease. It was interesting and sweet.

[Amaunet]

God, if that doesn't just bring up some memories for me. Unlike the couple of the poem, my experience wasn't quite so nice. No happy ending, but ohh you've done a great job!

[Nik Dendera]

As you know, I'm not one for 'love'. But nice poem, anyhoo.

Nice repeating of 'come what may'-you use it in the second and third stanzas. Just really works in that way.

It's always good to have a story, too. I hate poetry where it's just random words thrown together. To write a poem to a story is hard, so kudos for the effort. You did good!