Mirrors

This poem is slightly philosophical and romantic. It was written quite spontaneously.

Shatterred mirrors and broken minds,

solace in life,

is hard to find

 

like a mirror,

your mind reflects,

on future successes,

and past neglects

 

like dust or grime,

over time,

our fears build,

over love we pine

 

always searching,

but rarely found,

true love,

is so profound

 

like the shiny glass,

and solid frame,

of a mirror built,

in virtue's name

 

your soul it seeks,

to light the flame,

of truth and love,

you look above

 

at the sky so clear,

and you think again,

that seeking love,

is sometimes vein

 

when your mind wrestles,

with thoughts profane,

in life's cruel pattern,

is there any shame?

Reviews

[Everchanging Disaster]

Wow...I mean wow. This is very deep-I love the concept...the rhyme scheme is so simple but seems so intricate coupled with your word choice, and more over I absolutely love your metaphors-they are perhaps one of my favorite weapons in the poets arsenal...BRAVO!
Another truly classic write!
Always a pleasure!

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Well J, I'm certainly impressed. It is reflective piece with some romance entwined in the mix. Good job.

"Shattered mirrors and broken minds,
solace in life,
is hard to find" ~ A very nice opening.

"like a mirror,
your mind reflects,
on future successes,
and past neglects" ~ I love the analogy created here. Nice work.

[Amaunet]

Great job at capturing the emotion. The words make it where you can actually visualize the image of both love and a mirror to mind.

I especially liked this verse:

'always searching,

but rarely found,

true love,

is so profound'

[Ladysue]

This was a beautifully expression. It flowed easy and the rhyme gave it a light easy sing song feel.

I absolutely love these line...

your soul it seeks,
to light the flame,
of truth and love,
you look above

I loved the read and the message as well. Nice work.

[Eldee]

This was lovely!
Loved the message and the rhyme that you had through it.
Was there supposed to be a pattern to the rhyming though? I admit I couldn't find one, it kept jumping from aba, to aabb, to abab, and then had a line of no rhyme somewhere...

[Raven Wilson]

Again your rhyme sceme, done exquistly really adds, Its odd but I like the message this portrays, its familiar