Wow...I mean wow. This is very deep-I love the concept...the rhyme scheme is so simple but seems so intricate coupled with your word choice, and more over I absolutely love your metaphors-they are perhaps one of my favorite weapons in the poets arsenal...BRAVO!
Another truly classic write!
Always a pleasure!
Nice use of rhyme & carrying the mirror metaphor throughout the poem. (= I particularly enjoyed the verse, "like the shiny glass, / and solid frame, / of a mirror built, / in virtue's name" Catchy, deep, beautiful. Nice job. :)
Using mirrors as a metaphor into one's heart and mind, is very well chosen. Dust, dirt and grime, tend to build up on mirrors, if they are not cared for, just as the heart and mind. I sense that the narrator is hopeful to find love, but then again, wrestles with him/herself as whether or not it truly exists at all . . .
"when your mind wrestles,
with thoughts profane,
in life's cruel pattern,
is there any shame?"
The only change I suggest is changing the word "vein" to "vain", but maybe you have it spelt this way for a reason. Overall, a deep, insightful poem that packs a powerful message.
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