The House
A Poem by
Twilight
I remember well,
When we used to dwell,
Two brothers,
In that house from hell
But I was lucky,
For I escaped,
Before the hour,
Of night was late
The shuttered doors,
Creaked and groaned,
Unholy moans,
As I lay alone
But my poor brother,
In another room,
Slept alone,
So near to doom
He knew not,
Of this evil house,
What our heirs,
Would never share
Until that night,
When I took fright,
Leaving him alone,
To die or fight
Down those stairs,
As they creaked,
I heard my brother,
Start to weep
I turned once more,
To face that place,
With rude fear,
Upon my face
Then all at once,
I heard the wind,
Knowing that,
I had sinned
Before my eyes,
I saw the sight,
And heard the wail,
Of an evil wight
Its ghostly shape,
Of an evil wraith,
Grey and misty,
Formed a dark cape
In my fear,
I swooned and fell,
In that howling wind,
I could not tell
If that weeping sound,
Which I heard before,
Was my brother's moans,
Or the creaking door.
© 2008 Twilight
Featured Review
The rhyming flowed perfectly. I loved it. Of course, you know how I love some supernatural pieces :D
Before my eyes,
I saw the sight,
And heard the wail,
Of an evil wight
I love these lines. I don't think I've ever heard "wight" before. Very different. I like how you used old English throughout the piece.
Nice work! :)
Posted 15 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Chilling poem! Much enjoyed.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Chilling poem! Much enjoyed.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Amazing, I love it. Defiantly my favorite poem on WC. By far.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Amazing, I love it. Defiantly my favorite poem on WC. By far.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Very nice work. A scary yet well written poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah
Posted 15 Years Ago
Very nice work. A scary yet well written poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
scary, I liked it but it makes me think of nightmares I used to and still do have sometimes. Very descriptive.
Posted 15 Years Ago
scary, I liked it but it makes me think of nightmares I used to and still do have sometimes. Very descriptive.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Nice mixing of old and new. You've managed to marry the old scots word Ken (for know) with modern words. Awesome job. And your use of Wight and Wraith.... Ahhh simply wonderful!
Posted 15 Years Ago
Nice mixing of old and new. You've managed to marry the old scots word Ken (for know) with modern words. Awesome job. And your use of Wight and Wraith.... Ahhh simply wonderful!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Twilight, um, seems more abusive than creepy to me,
maybe because I've been abused, so it triggered those thoughts,
but either channel, it is morbid, ---much love, mishel
Posted 15 Years Ago
Twilight, um, seems more abusive than creepy to me,
maybe because I've been abused, so it triggered those thoughts,
but either channel, it is morbid, ---much love, mishel
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
J, you placed me on a journey of fear and betrayal. This piece read like a well-crafted story. You did good with imagery and cut out all of the unnecessary words without compromising the theme. Nice job.
Posted 15 Years Ago
J, you placed me on a journey of fear and betrayal. This piece read like a well-crafted story. You did good with imagery and cut out all of the unnecessary words without compromising the theme. Nice job.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I liked the feel of this read...it was very melodic, and you did a good job with keeping up a rather difficult rhyme scheme without making it seem terribly forced. I also like the imagery and word choice that you used, because you were able to illicit a definite feeling of fear and dread. Nicely done.
Posted 15 Years Ago
I liked the feel of this read...it was very melodic, and you did a good job with keeping up a rather difficult rhyme scheme without making it seem terribly forced. I also like the imagery and word choice that you used, because you were able to illicit a definite feeling of fear and dread. Nicely done.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I really appreciate how your words weave an atmosphere of dark despair. The direction of your poem is in complete opposition to where I thought it was originally go, but that's a good thing. Keep shining!
Posted 15 Years Ago
I really appreciate how your words weave an atmosphere of dark despair. The direction of your poem is in complete opposition to where I thought it was originally go, but that's a good thing. Keep shining!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
The rhyming flowed perfectly. I loved it. Of course, you know how I love some supernatural pieces :D
Before my eyes,
I saw the sight,
And heard the wail,
Of an evil wight
I love these lines. I don't think I've ever heard "wight" before. Very different. I like how you used old English throughout the piece.
Nice work! :)
Posted 15 Years Ago
The rhyming flowed perfectly. I loved it. Of course, you know how I love some supernatural pieces :D
Before my eyes,
I saw the sight,
And heard the wail,
Of an evil wight
I love these lines. I don't think I've ever heard "wight" before. Very different. I like how you used old English throughout the piece.
Nice work! :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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