Crystal Sea

Please take me,

To that crystal sea,

Where your arms,

Welcome me

 

In joyous praise,

I long to give,

So much love,

As you once did

 

Your waves wash,

From sea to shore,

It is only you,

That I adore

 

In you alone,

I place my trust,

A love to keep,

In the ocean deep.

Reviews

[Just Manoosh]

I like the flow of this but it feels like the start of something..... like there is more to come?

I would almost add a complete change of pace, an ending perhaps, but thats just my thought.... It is always a compliment when you inspire other writers to write, so well done honey.

"For then you came....

You tore at me until I broke,
Lashed at my heart and made it choke.
In your sodden arms I cried,
....You squeezed at me until I died".

Mx

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

absolutely beautiful. i love that image of a crystal sea. it is such a great expression and it speaks on so many volumes. love -- it's the best part of being alive. and this simple truth was spoken so well here. reading this brought sweetness to my emotions. thanks for sharing it.

[Twilight]

Thanks, Ern.

[Pryde Foltz]

Beautiful write. I reminded that water and depths and flow are a metaphor for our psyche. This is a transportive piece. Thank you:)

[Twilight]

Quite so. "Rain" is another commonly used metaphor too, emotionally and in other rains. In "My Rain" and "Crystal Rain", I sure kept with a watery theme; but hope that you don't become "all at sea with it all"? Best wishes. I love to "read requests", Pryde.

[Pryde Foltz]

Can someone get too much time at sea:)

[Twilight]

Lol, then you're "all washed up".!

[Glenda]

Thank you, Julian, for allowing me to see the ghosts of Chistmases past, as it were.

Beauty and Wonder are in your words.

G.

[Lindsey]

This is beautiful and lovley. I like the way it was arranged and it was joyously wounderful. I like it!

[J.Black]

Congratulations Julian on your achievement with this delicate poem. I wish I had reviewed it sooner- when I was pondering across this site in secret after leaving. The images are so vivid and crisp; clear like the flow of water trickling down a ink stained page. The water submerged these words together angelically! Well done.

[deeps]

I really like this it's wonderful
and beautiful

[Surrealstorm]

I Think this flows so nicely! I like the short lines and to me it doesn't seem like it needs to be long and drawn out. Its short and sweet with a good rhythm that makes it memorable. Great write!

[Ama May Cooper]

Such a beautiful flowing tale, of a painful but free love. Sweet and kind. i really liked this piece a beautiful write