My Rain

In this poem, I hope to have captured the purity and redeeming qualities which we tend to associate with rain and the ocean waves. Perhaps also, I have suggested that rain can be a means of escape from the cruel world?

Oh rain please come and cleanse my soul,

Please wash it down,

From top to toe,

And then no more,

Shall I fear,

The devil's shadows as they near,

 

But I am safe in my garden,

Free from harm,

And from thraldom,

Despite the devil,

And my pain,

Come back to me oh blessed rain!

 

 

As I walk,

In my garden,

I long to rest upon the crest,

Of some tall wave,

My mind it wanders,

Amidst long shadows with few bright wonders,

 

Oh rain please come and cleanse my soul!

My mind and body,

From top to toe,

Of some tall wave,

I still seek,

Without which,

My heart it weeps.

Reviews

[Helen Woodward]

Beautiful!!! I couldnt agree more with your train of thought concerning the cleansing quality of water. It is a resource we completely take for granted, I know there are those who despise rain, but I'm not one of them.
Your prose is tight with clearly defined content.
Loved it...and welcome to the cafe' :-)
Helen.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Among my favorite things are: the smell of fresh-cut grass and spring onions, the silence of new-fallen snow and how it makes everything new, the aftercalm of a thunderstorm, and the freshness that lingers after a spring shower.

There is, indeed, a cleansing and a purity that comes from the rain. I personally love it and welcome it whenever it arrives.

Your words are refreshing.

Linda Marie Van Tassell

[Sarah]

Very pretty - the first stanza in particular. I like the idea of the rain cleansing you of your fears, and, in doing so, keeping you safe. (: Any particular reason every word is capitilized? o_O Just wondering, because it was a little distracting... regardless, great poem. :)

[Angelic Darkness]

Don't we all wish to escape, which makes us the writers
we are today..escaping in our own world, our own time.
This poem reflects that as well, a plea so to speak. AD

[Liam Riley]

WOW!

This is amazing!

Seriously, great job!

It was fluent and the descriptive.

10!

[T]

Wonderfully written! I have always thought of the rain in terms of cleansing the soul as well as replenishing ... A most wonderful read ... hugs

[Wildecat]

This is a beautiful poem, thanks so much for sharing.

[darkgurl]

Oh Rain Please Come And Cleanse My Soul!
My Mind And Body,
From Top To Toe,
Of Some Tall Wave,
I Still Seek,
Without Which,
My Heart It Weeps.

WOW! I so loved these words here, kinda of truthful too, this is so AWESOME, i like this write and will be adding it to my faves, This touched me....Kim

[MagiCrystal]

As I Walk,

In My Garden,

I Long To Rest Upon The Crest,

Of Some Tall Wave,

My Mind It Wanders,

Amidst Long Shadows With Few Bright Wonders

I do wonder.. about the rain and you want it to cleanse your soul...very nice piece ..love it Magic

[Julienne Norris]

Beautifully written, I feel as if I am in the garden surrounded by the Devil and his Advocates. I don't often enjoy poems with biblical references, but the words you chose and how you put the pieces together is so subtle. I read 'My Rain' four times before I truly saw the imagery and meaning hidden in the lines. It is the first time in years that I read something that I truly enjoyed enough to take it apart and try to find the deeper meaning.
Bravo!