My Rain

In this poem, I hope to have captured the purity and redeeming qualities which we tend to associate with rain and the ocean waves. Perhaps also, I have suggested that rain can be a means of escape.

Oh rain please come and cleanse my soul,

Please wash it down,

From top to toe,

And then no more,

Shall I fear,

The devil's shadows as they near,

 

But I am safe in my garden,

Free from harm,

And from thraldom,

Despite the devil,

And my pain,

Come back to me oh blessed rain!

 

 

As I walk,

In my garden,

I long to rest upon the crest,

Of some tall wave,

My mind it wanders,

Amidst long shadows with few bright wonders,

 

Oh rain please come and cleanse my soul!

My mind and body,

From top to toe,

Of some tall wave,

I still seek,

Without which,

My heart it weeps.

Author's Note

In theme, this links with my "Crystal Sea" and "Crystal Fountain" poems.

Reviews

[Helen Woodward]

Beautiful!!! I couldnt agree more with your train of thought concerning the cleansing quality of water. It is a resource we completely take for granted, I know there are those who despise rain, but I'm not one of them.
Your prose is tight with clearly defined content.
Loved it...and welcome to the cafe' :-)
Helen.

[Carolin Meisner]

O my God!
it was one of the best poems I ever read!
I liked it quite a lot, how you rhyme and get to go back to, oh rain please come and cleanse my soul,
your poetry inspired me!
thanks!

[Twilight]

Thanks, Carolin. For your praise, and encouragement.!

[Suicidal Teddybear]

wow this is gorgious. Its very spiritual and just kind of lifted my mood and made me want to stand in the rain. Brilliant read

[Twilight]

A positive review, from a fellow Brit. too! Keep writing yourself, and best wishes.

[Lorraine]

Interesting. You made the rain seem like a Greek god of some sort. Also, I find some degree of innocence in this writing. I imagine this poem taken from the mind of a little child. You captured the way children seem to look at ordinary things with such faith and hope. Good Job.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Twilight]

A closed account by Lorraine, but at least she found time to praise my writing. One day, perhaps she might be back.? After all, I have returned...

[Lydia]

This is gorgeous. You paint a vivid picture with your words. I loved it :)

[Twilight]

You're not on my friends list, but nobody's perfect,! And, you found time to review; so you can't be allowed bad lol? Anyway, keep calm and carry on..!

[54321]

preeeeetttty! :) This is another short and sweet one! I love the rain. My code name is raindropoflife. You really played up the use of rain and all its meanings... love it!

[Susan]

there is something about water, that cleanses our souls and bodies. i think we all seek to be cleansed in some form or another. Water is one of our most valuable resources on this planet that so many take for granted. When you live in the desert and dont know when the next rain will come, you learn to value it.
A beautifully written poem.

[Twilight]

Thanks for the insightful review, Susan.

[Lizanne]

The wonderful cleansing rain. You said it all so wonderfully. Take a bow and do an encore. You deserve it.

[Twilight]

Well, it was nothing lol! Thanks for the encouragement.

[[untitled]]

Very nice! And, quite lovely to read on a chilly, rainy, Florida evening.

I see the rain as a complete and total cleansing of the narrator's mind and soul. A comfort. A solace.

Raindrops can often soothe the spirit . . . and wash away all the worries of the day and the days to come.

Beautiful!

[Twilight]

A rather insightful and positive review again, from "untitled". Oh my, working out his/her/hybrid's "pronouns" - would probably be fun lol.

[Serephine]

I really like this. It seems that the person saying the poem is trying to wash away his sins, make them go away, or to better so that he doesn't go to fell.

It seems that he's desperate for it and he's truly sorry for what he did.

It's a really good poem!

[Twilight]

Ah, the lovely Serephine! Where art thou..? Thankyou for praising my writing, anyway...