This poem tells of the inevitability of death. It also refers to the sanctuary of your first love (at the end of verse five). I also suggested that perhaps we are always seeking a form of love which recognises our true qualities.....
I agree with BrightEyes in that the rhyme scheme of this poem is upbeat. In a way, it almost reminds me of something you'd see in a kid's book because of its flow and rhythm (perhaps that is because I have two young kids as well!). In a way, it is a nice contrast to the dark message of our inability to escape Death. It isn't as morose and overly somber like some poems, and I like that.
I also really enjoyed the last two stanzas of your poem because it sends a message of hope and strength about Life. You go from talking about Death to Love. While Death is inevitable, we as living creatures still strive to live to our fullest and to be recognized for it in others--to burn the brightest, so to speak--despite the end that shall come to us. In a way, it reminds me of Dylan Thomas' " Do not go gently into that good night/ Rage, rage against the dying of the light."
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Thankyou kindly, for such a thoughtful and detailed review.
I agree with BrightEyes in that the rhyme scheme of this poem is upbeat. In a way, it almost reminds me of something you'd see in a kid's book because of its flow and rhythm (perhaps that is because I have two young kids as well!). In a way, it is a nice contrast to the dark message of our inability to escape Death. It isn't as morose and overly somber like some poems, and I like that.
I also really enjoyed the last two stanzas of your poem because it sends a message of hope and strength about Life. You go from talking about Death to Love. While Death is inevitable, we as living creatures still strive to live to our fullest and to be recognized for it in others--to burn the brightest, so to speak--despite the end that shall come to us. In a way, it reminds me of Dylan Thomas' " Do not go gently into that good night/ Rage, rage against the dying of the light."
Posted 15 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 Month Ago
Thankyou kindly, for such a thoughtful and detailed review.
I really enjoyed this one. It's transformation from bleak to hopeful, reassuring us that there will always be death...BUT, the one thing death can not kill is love.
I wanted to say the exact same thing that was previously pointed out, the rhymes and rhythm, tempo of the poem was magnificent, I had to read it out loud to give it more justice the second time, nicely done.
Nicely written... The tempo of the flow catches your eye and heart and makes you want to read it. truly amazing!
It's a perfect portrayal of how despite the enevitable end we all face (death) that we still seek the beauty of a love that while not blind completes us!
We sure do wish for that!!! Loved the last stanza!!! LOL..This was a joy to read. The rhyme was strong and provided a good contrast to a more seriousness of the piece. Very well done my friend!
The rhythm and rhyme of this poem, along with the wording of the first stanza, immediately brought to my mind the feel of a fairy tale. All things die except the memory of that first sweet kiss. It's true. OR that first sweet love.
the rhyme scheme here does give the piece an upbeat and joyous feel which belies the meaning within; a nice contrast really. There is a melancholy to the topic, bordering on almost a hopeless feel...which is turned upon itself at the end, with the seeking of beauty yet still...despite the inevitable outcome life holds...and the mention of the magic of a first kiss.
The rhyme scheme her makes this poem seem very upbeat, almost bouncy...and yet the poem itself is rather sad. I like it! Can't wait to read your other work!
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